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TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE 3-10-& 3-17

Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 10, 2009 10:21 am

Time to get out our poetic quill pens and try this week's prompts.

1. Write a poetic apology, either serious or tongue-in-cheek to anyone or anything you choose.

2. If the steam in your beloved coffee were to form into a shape/picture in the air, what would it show? A verse, please.

3. Word list from which to create a poem, any style or length:
clean, season, spirit, quicksand, avail, suggest, intention, present, touch, simple

Okay, go for it! Let's have a great outpouring of poetic thoughts.
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Postby mae » Tue Mar 10, 2009 10:53 am

#1 - I wrote this several years ago

Apologia



If days’ events were kindly fair
with naught occurring to furrow the brow,
nor happenstance to burden one’s heart,
terse discourse ’twixt us should be rare.

If the great bowl of sky o’er us
were always reminiscent of robins’ eggs
or twinkling sapphires at the pool’s bottom,
no twitching tongue could bring a fuss.

Alas, the opposite is more often true!
Gray skies reflect a gray countenance
and a glowering mien’s more oft displayed
than a softer, more pleasing view.

I pray thee, forgive my dagger tongue
and the nettled glance I cast at thee.
Accept my plea and pardon my affront
And show the smile on which my hopes are hung.


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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 10, 2009 4:11 pm

Gotta watch that tongue, mae! Was the suitably humble apology accepted? Of course I expect a NEW one from you as well. Otherwise, it's too easy. :twisted:
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Postby mae » Tue Mar 10, 2009 6:47 pm

Yes, mlou, the apology was accepted. However, I do not always live up to expectations - and at least SOME things in life should be easy!

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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 12, 2009 9:23 am

True...but are they ever? :roll:
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 12, 2009 9:35 am

#2

FANTASY
Steam rises from the cup,
drifting and twisting
into imagined shapes...
a gondola afloat
on Venetian canals,
a petaled rose unfolding,
the tail of a kite
lifting away into nothing
on my expelled breath.
I dally over my coffee
reluctant to grapple
with another day.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 14, 2009 12:23 pm

Saturday already? "Time flies" is an understatement. :) Hope we get some answers to the challenges over the weekend.
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Postby mslover » Sat Mar 14, 2009 12:26 pm

promise to work on it this weekend.... ;)

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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 17, 2009 4:13 pm

Holding this one over, as it hasn't really had much of a play yet. :(
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Postby JillStar » Tue Mar 17, 2009 5:58 pm

A Pitchfork and a Burning Torch

Please see my writing blog for this poem

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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 17, 2009 6:15 pm

Well said, jillstar! I soooo agree. The country seems to have gone mad. Putting future generations into a debt that will never be paid off (interest being what it is :x ). And WASTING billions on bailouts for places that should be allowed to go bankrupt, if their execs cannot manage their companies...but give themselves horrendous bonuses anyway.
(I know this isn't the thread for our burning and helpless anger...maybe you should start a political thread here Jill. Perhaps the number of people in agreement might be surprising. I've picked up on the rebellious thoughts of several members. :idea: )

On the poetic note: You might consider revising the opening to:
I sense the anger of future generations.... Maybe a bit clearer?
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Postby Mlou » Wed Mar 18, 2009 4:31 pm

word list challenge

DISCONNECT

A new spirit is rising
in this season of despair.
From the clean heartland
of our nation, it blows
toward the quicksand swamp
of Washington, where those
sent to speak for us,
avail themselves
of privileges beyond our means.
In this present climate,
they are deaf to our suggestions,
heedless of our protests.
Their good intentions are
simply lip-service.
Our representatives
have lost touch with the
American people.
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 20, 2009 9:08 am

Bumping this for our "missing" poets. :) C'mon, guys, I know you have some ideas brewing.
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Postby Olsenpotter » Fri Mar 20, 2009 1:56 pm

I'm so sorry

I know...
I should have written before now.
The baby, school, that book I started yet haven't finished,
has kept me from dropping a poem,
or a simple note
to say
"What do you think of Sexton?"
or
"How about that new W.C.W. poem?"

I know...
and I'm really sorry about that.
I'll leave you a note in the freezer.
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Postby Olsenpotter » Fri Mar 20, 2009 2:01 pm

Seeing Things

I only drink when I'm stressed.
I'm stressed about 90% of the time.

The other 10%, I'm asleep.

But I knew the moment
I saw the stream transform
from wisps and air
into the face of Emerson
telling me to use a semicolon,
that I needed something
more...
I'll leave you a note in the freezer.
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Postby PaulG » Fri Mar 20, 2009 4:22 pm

Coyote Couple
She sits her chair against the wall
Sorry she ever met this guy, Paul.
Her intent that day was misconstrued
Most likely from a dearth of food!

His mind will question and forever wonder why
Why he approached her, as he lets out a sigh.
He agrees with her view and flashes a grin
In his own case it was just too much gin!

Old demon rum has again left his card
When he makes you fall, you always fall hard.
In another time, in another place
Each would be repelled by each other’s face!
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 20, 2009 4:38 pm

Welcome back, OP and Paul. Nice themes, guys.
Emerson, OP? Wow, I'm going to change my coffee brand. I'd like to see him, or maybe Longfellow, looking in to give me advice.
Paul I'm not sure which challenge you are answering? Or maybe it's a "floater"? :) I must be really slow today because I'm missing something vital in your title. Why are they coyotes? (Vital, title...hmmm. Have we got a poem potential here? lol)
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Postby PaulG » Fri Mar 20, 2009 11:39 pm

Mlou- I started on the "apology" theme and wandered off. I've been out of the loop for the past ten days and wanted to get something done. I'll try another of the challenges hopefully later in the weekend. This time I'll put in more than 12 minutes.

They're not coyotes, they are coyote ugly.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 21, 2009 9:11 am

Yes, we missed you. And hey...you're in there producing and that's what counts. I figure if I churn out enough material, some of it's bound to be "not too bad". :-D
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Postby PaulG » Sat Mar 21, 2009 6:37 pm

Visions in the Vapors
In the cool moist air on the good side of dawn
I stand near the bench to await my ride.
I buy a coffee to warm and wake me
Half-conscious commuter in the cold first light.
I gaze in the haze that erupts from the cup
Finding images broadcast in the sun filled mist.
A private show for the java’s bleary eyed owner
Unseen by the morning’s other waiting fares.
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 22, 2009 3:24 pm

Paul, you had such good inner rhyme going in line five and with a nice meter, that I found myself willing the other lines to follow suit. Finding images rise before my eyes, a private show for this mocha Joe...etc, etc. :-D I notice you were pretty cozy about just what it was you saw though.
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Postby PaulG » Sun Mar 22, 2009 7:26 pm

Mlou- line 5 kind of threw me off a bit. I liked it but didn't want to get into any more sing-song. I like your 2 ideas for 6 & 7 a lot though. I actually cut two other lines from the end. Nothing to do with the steam. Just another quick rhyme which initially amused me. And still does.

I wasn't trying to show what was in the steam, more so setting the scene.
We all see something different.

:yimcoffee:
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Postby mae » Mon Mar 23, 2009 1:19 pm

Hey, Olsen and PaulG, those were great!

Olsen, dear one, I was so lost when I read your poems, but it was a good kind of lost - if you catch my drift. I had no idea what you were talking about - still don't - but I liked it anyway. They were just so delightfully...off-balance!

Paul, I didn't get Coyote Couple - I also don't know what coyote ugly means - (vital in the title, mlou? Kewl!) but I loved Visions in the Vapors. You caught me in your very first line (good job!) with "the good side of dawn". Great line!

I, too, wanted the internal rhyme to continue. It's just so much fun. Why are you afraid of sing-song? Even sing-song has its place. This way, it sort of felt like you forgot something.

But...I still liked the poem. It makes me sleepy and a little cold.

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Postby Mlou » Mon Mar 23, 2009 1:27 pm

And what about you, mae? No visions in your steam? :)
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Postby PaulG » Mon Mar 23, 2009 7:20 pm

Hey Mae, thanks for the comments.

Forget the "Coyote", that was batting practice. Just kicking off the dust of travel.

I agree, about the rhyme. I like internal rhyming as well.
I just wanted to set an early morning "why am I here ?" mood.
You said you felt "sleepy & cold". That's some of the feeling I hoped to convey.

Maybe I'll rework a version 2 for you & Mlou! :-D
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