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- mae
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Well, I don't get it after one reading, but I'll read it again. Though, in all honesty, I probably won't get it then either.
Now, the one just preceding it - would make a great entry in my contest!!!! mae
Now, the one just preceding it - would make a great entry in my contest!!!! mae
My heart beats in poetry. I think in rhythm and dream in rhyme.
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Yeah, well, that one was a while ago. Preteniousness R Us.
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I think I just found my signature lines.
I think here I found mine:
Passion is lonely business.
Still I think almost everything in life is lonely business.
A buffer bred of too many too-much-the-same excuses
Nurtured by long nights and longer afternoons
What do you mean with "buffer"?
Is it the portrait of an experienced writer? Are you referring to anyone in particular?
Oh, I like it, it seems to me an insight into a writer's approach.
"I think that in order to understand other people's suffering and distress one must have, among other things, a great imagination."
YOU ARE TO ME WHAT YOU CHOSE TO BE.
YOU ARE TO ME WHAT YOU CHOSE TO BE.
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Daniel wrote:What do you mean with "buffer"?
My callousness is a buffer between me and the world.
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Yeah, good thing too because underneath he's a real softie! 

nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
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Nice, Mudge... I enjoyed the last two very much.
Mslover... errr... ouch.
Mslover... errr... ouch.
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Yeah, MS ain't having a buttercup day, I'm suspecting . . .
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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Ya think?
mae
mae
My heart beats in poetry. I think in rhythm and dream in rhyme.
Give me a crit! I can take it!
CELTIC QUEEN, an Epic Poem, Cynthia M. Bateman, amazon.com, barnesandnoble.com, http://www.tatepublishing.com/bookstore ... +Epic+Poem at Tate Publishing
Give me a crit! I can take it!
CELTIC QUEEN, an Epic Poem, Cynthia M. Bateman, amazon.com, barnesandnoble.com, http://www.tatepublishing.com/bookstore ... +Epic+Poem at Tate Publishing
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OK, this is a song, so the meter is off. And still a work in progress:
I grew up in the midwest, in a small, small town
Back then I could not wait to move away
I thought all my neighbors were just redneck know--it-alls
I'm here to tell, when I go back these days
. . .It's just like I remember it
My brother runs the dairy that my dad and granddad built
They worked themselves to death raising cows
I thought it was a damn hard way to make a living then
When I go back to help my brother now
. . .It's just like I remember it
(bridge)
I never understood the small town gossip
Or some narrow-minded preacher trying to tell me to do good
Mama wasn't in to home-grown cooking
I don't blame her; I know she did the best she could
She says if she thought she could move away, she would
I moved to Atlanta when I was seventeen
Full of piss and fire and know-it-all
Back then I thought that city was the grandest thing I'd seen
Tonight I walk through Mid-town and recall
. . . and it's just like I remember it.
I grew up in the midwest, in a small, small town
Back then I could not wait to move away
I thought all my neighbors were just redneck know--it-alls
I'm here to tell, when I go back these days
. . .It's just like I remember it
My brother runs the dairy that my dad and granddad built
They worked themselves to death raising cows
I thought it was a damn hard way to make a living then
When I go back to help my brother now
. . .It's just like I remember it
(bridge)
I never understood the small town gossip
Or some narrow-minded preacher trying to tell me to do good
Mama wasn't in to home-grown cooking
I don't blame her; I know she did the best she could
She says if she thought she could move away, she would
I moved to Atlanta when I was seventeen
Full of piss and fire and know-it-all
Back then I thought that city was the grandest thing I'd seen
Tonight I walk through Mid-town and recall
. . . and it's just like I remember it.
"Throughout history, Truth and Love have always won." - M. Ghandi
"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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You're ringing bells here. My grandfather had a large herd of cows and when my Dad had to take over, the first thing he did was get rid of them. He HATED cows. Good start. As you're still smoothing it out, we'll wait for the finish. Soon to be heard on i-pod?
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heehee . . . ya never know, mlou.
This is one where I am kinda saying everything I want to say, but the phrases aren't there yet. BUT . . . it's all over my white board, and since I needed to do some actual WORK thereon, I needed to get it written down somewhere else.
This is one where I am kinda saying everything I want to say, but the phrases aren't there yet. BUT . . . it's all over my white board, and since I needed to do some actual WORK thereon, I needed to get it written down somewhere else.
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Wish I could pull you in my arms
And wipe your pain away;
Wish I could give the smile back you gave me yesterday;
Put you on a pedestal, do what he couldn't do . . .
But if I could and if I did, I'd probably hurt you, too.
Wish I could work the hands of time
And change the way things are;
Wish I had more to offer than 3 chords on my guitar;
I'd make your heart forget his face, and show you love anew . . .
But if I could and if I did, I'd probably hurt you, too.
Wish I could lie and stroke your hair
Until you fell asleep;
And whisper gentle promises we both know I can't keep;
Then wake you in the morning with the kiss of love that's true . . .
But if I could and if I did, I'd probably hurt you, too.
And wipe your pain away;
Wish I could give the smile back you gave me yesterday;
Put you on a pedestal, do what he couldn't do . . .
But if I could and if I did, I'd probably hurt you, too.
Wish I could work the hands of time
And change the way things are;
Wish I had more to offer than 3 chords on my guitar;
I'd make your heart forget his face, and show you love anew . . .
But if I could and if I did, I'd probably hurt you, too.
Wish I could lie and stroke your hair
Until you fell asleep;
And whisper gentle promises we both know I can't keep;
Then wake you in the morning with the kiss of love that's true . . .
But if I could and if I did, I'd probably hurt you, too.
"Throughout history, Truth and Love have always won." - M. Ghandi
"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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Better to imagine a perfect love than to ruin it with reality?
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moonlight and roses turns into daylight and dishes
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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Mudge, I'm reading up from the bottom, so I haven't seen the things you've got at the top of the page yet, but, I LOVE THE 'WISH I..' PIECE!!!!! Especially the last line of each stanza. Oh, very well done, sir, very well done! mae
My heart beats in poetry. I think in rhythm and dream in rhyme.
Give me a crit! I can take it!
CELTIC QUEEN, an Epic Poem, Cynthia M. Bateman, amazon.com, barnesandnoble.com, http://www.tatepublishing.com/bookstore ... +Epic+Poem at Tate Publishing
Give me a crit! I can take it!
CELTIC QUEEN, an Epic Poem, Cynthia M. Bateman, amazon.com, barnesandnoble.com, http://www.tatepublishing.com/bookstore ... +Epic+Poem at Tate Publishing
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Thanks, Mae. Too much time on the beach, I guess . . . getting melancholy.
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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I like it very much, Mudge. You started out with a good rhythm and I'd like to see it continued in line 3 with just a slight change. Something like:
Wish I coul give you back the smile
you gave me yesterday.
Wish I coul give you back the smile
you gave me yesterday.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
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Um . . . actually . . . I think that's what it was supposed to be . . .
I was typing in a hurry.
I was typing in a hurry.
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"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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Oh, my usual singer-songwriter mash . . . Kind of Lou Reed meets Blondie with sprinkles of Al Gore.
"Throughout history, Truth and Love have always won." - M. Ghandi
"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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www.wowwebnow.com
"Truth and Love often get the crap kicked out of them along the way." -D. Mudge
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