TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE 4-13-10

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TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE 4-13-10

Postby Mlou » Tue Apr 13, 2010 11:05 pm

We'll make it an easy challenge this week, as you're all busy keeping up with your daily poem. :) Perhaps a word list will act as a jumping off spot...

1. List from which to build a poem:
wheel, lively, bare, tension, pillar, span, frame, reflect, order, nail

2. What surprised you the most this week? Was it a happy one or a not-so great?

PS Upon coming back, I noticed I had pillow and pillar...too much alike, so I replaced one with "bare". If you've already used one or the other though, that's fine. :)
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Postby mae » Thu Apr 15, 2010 4:04 am

The Word List (also posted on the Poetry Month Challenge thread

Romance at the Millrace

The water wheel was a lively place
for watching maidens lovely of face
washing bare feet in the cold millrace.

The tension was thick among the young men
watching from pillar and post and then
approaching young women come in from the glen.

The span of the doorframe was an armlength and more
and their reach reflected the order they bore.
He chose first who touched the nail in the door.

If he chose another man's maid,
then a fight ensued, the game must be played.
Until one day there came a renegade.

A handsome fellow new to the town
heard of the wheel and came on down.
He watched the hi-jinks with a bit of a frown.

When he asked the purpose of the nail in the door,
he was quickly told and set straight on the score.
The winner would be the tallest once more.

We'll see, pondered the thoughtful stranger
Judging the others to offer no danger,
he doffed his shirt, tossing it in toward the manger

His muscles rippling, he strode with a swagger.
Surprised by his move, others fell with a stagger,
save one, the tallest, who drew his dagger.

"I wouldn't, were I you," he coldly warned.
"I'm sure you wouldn't," the stranger scorned,
and looked for a maiden his arm to adorn.

The dagger flew, ruffling the man's hair.
He stopped and for a moment just stood there
then sent his own knife hurtling through the air.

Unlike the first, his aim was true
but still, he'd thrown it slightly askew.
for killing was an action he chose to eschew.


He left town soon after and hasn't returned
No doubt to another milltown adjourned
where lessons in fairplay are more easily learned.

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Postby Fireflare77 » Thu Apr 15, 2010 11:13 am

I tried, but it looks like my muse is on strike this week :/
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Postby Mlou » Thu Apr 15, 2010 8:36 pm

word list

NEED VERSUS NATURE

In orderly march, steel pillars
cut a swathe across my meadow,
through the woodlot and
southward out of sight.
Great cables span the heights from
tower to tower, humming like
swarms of lively bees. I feel their
thrumming in my bones and
in the air a tension lifts
the hair on my bare arms.
Crows wheel above, black dots
reflected in mirrored surfaces,
but do not settle here.
Instinct turns them away,
unneedful of bold red DANGER signs
nailed to the framework.
Power for the cities
comes at a cost, defacing the land
and swallowing its serenity.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...





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Postby Fireflare77 » Fri Apr 16, 2010 1:50 pm

FML

Wheeling and dealing,
The liveliest bunch around.
Laughing and eating,
Laughs and gluttany abound.

My bare nerves exposed,
The tension in my mind,
Ready to implode,
The nail in the coffin.

It's obvious, them,
My pillars of support,
Condemned to crumble.

My order not reflected in your famous eyes,
You're the only one to collect the prize.
The final stanza left unwritten.
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Postby Mlou » Fri Apr 16, 2010 2:57 pm

Fireflare, now I'm curious. What does FML stand for?
Good start with the word list. Just missed span and frame. You might think about substituting another word for the 2nd "laugh". And why are the eyes famous? Inquiring minds like to know. :)
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Postby Mlou » Fri Apr 16, 2010 3:01 pm

Wow, mae, you really turned it into a saga, didn't you? But we didn't find out if he chose a maiden or not...
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Postby mae » Fri Apr 16, 2010 4:47 pm

It is safe to assume not, mlou, since he left town soon after - but the poem doesn't say he took anyone with him.

I loved writing that. It came so much easier than any of the others. It is, after all, a story.

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