TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE 4-6-10

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TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE 4-6-10

Postby Mlou » Mon Apr 05, 2010 10:26 am

Posting a day early this week. Will be tied up tomorrow. Soooo....

1. Have you, or someone you know, a phobia? Give us a verse please, light or serious about its effects on your life.

2. Word List of the Week, from which to build a poem...
peach, cloud, blanket, curl, slip, shape, tentacles, curtain, sigh, globe

3. Choose an exotic location where you HAVEN'T been. It can be real or imaginary. Write a poem on what you think,or hope, or fear, it would be like.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...


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Postby mslover » Mon Apr 05, 2010 11:39 pm

like the word list... lovely images. hopefully i can make something with it more than simply dreaming about doing it.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

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Postby mae » Tue Apr 06, 2010 4:30 am

This is for challenge #3. Not exactly what you asked for, but close.

The Celtic Queen

I should have been one,
I know I should.
I should have lived in one,
yes, I really should.

I should have been an Irish queen,
in a Irish castle,
lavishly benevolent to my subjects.

I would have ridden in my carriage
through tiny villages,
waving to the citizens and smiling.

The countryside would have been lush and green,
brimming over with abundance.
Children would have played
and run ahead of my carriage,
singing happy melodies.

Oh, no, there, look out!
Oh dear, we ran over one.

Sorry!


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Postby mae » Tue Apr 06, 2010 4:43 am

Another one for #3. I like this challenge!

Visiting Nature


When you visit mountains peak as a tourist
they put you in a slow-moving tram and haul you up,
hundreds over feet over the canyon

swinging and swaying.

The sky is close, but the ground is very far away.



When you visit rivers as a tourist,
they put you in a life vest and say don't let go,
then they shove you into the water

and the rapids.

And suddenly, you've let go.



When you visit caves as a tourist,
they make you hold your hand
in front of your face,

then they turn out the lights.

The darkness is so deep it weighs you down.

They call these things adventures.
I don't.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Apr 06, 2010 4:09 pm

I AM a sucker for word lists but sometimes I am annoyed by the idiot who makes them so hard! And I'm always asking for volunteer word lists in vain. So here's mine, anyway.
peach, cloud, blanket, curl, slip, shape, tentacles, curtain, sigh, globe

BECOMING

Slender branches, sequined with peach blossoms,
hang like tentacles, catch in my hair as I slip
within their sanctuary. Grass, bruised by my passage,
blankets the earth, sending forth its green scent.
Through a living curtain, I watch the changing shapes
of clouds ride the high current. Yet,
close to earth, only a whisper of wind sighs past,
fingering petals that will not fall.......not yet.
Their globes of fruit remain a dream curled in the bud,
as all my nebulous tomorrows wait
for my growing into them.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...





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Postby Mlou » Tue Apr 06, 2010 4:15 pm

lol, mae. The queen of the Celts wouldn't be riding in a sedate carriage. She'd be in a war chariot or riding a huge black stallion. At least in MY imaginary Celtic kingdom/queendom. Good ending...just when it was getting kind of saccharin and perfect, reality rears its head.
On your second one...I'm with you, mae. Unlike our own Hissmonster, who is a river rafter of some repute ROTFL, I don't court danger for danger's sake. Okay, in plain language, I'm a coward.
Love to see the thoughts people come up with from the challenges. Good ones, all!
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Postby mae » Tue Apr 06, 2010 5:54 pm

Jiminiy! Can you tell I wrote the last one at the wee hours of the morning? It's FULL of mistakes! mae
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Postby mae » Tue Apr 06, 2010 5:56 pm

MARY LOU! That's beautiful! I'm so impressed with your unique metaphors and word usages. "Grass, bruised by my passage..." "Through a living curtain" "a whisper of wind sighs past" Lovely. Just lovely.

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Postby Mlou » Tue Apr 06, 2010 6:26 pm

A big thank you, mae...I did enjoy pulling that one out of the list. Actually, it harks back to my young teens and our peach orchards at home. I'd lie in the little cavern beneath the branches and look up through at the sky, smelling the grass and the earth, and lazing around...until I had to go and help plant some more new little peach trees. lol
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Postby Olsenpotter » Wed Apr 07, 2010 12:41 pm

London

I've never been to London,
though I hear it's lovely...

I want to visit some out of the way
bridge named Potter's Brigde,

where John Potter started his trade.
The water will be softly passing by

like a flashback, hazy, glowing,
to days when men worked with their hands.

I'd be afraid to touch anything.
What if, somehow, he felt me there

and didn't approve? Didn't agree with
my life choices?

What if He thought I was a unstressed brick
in that bridge called Potter?

*Edit* Changed the last line.
Last edited by Olsenpotter on Thu Apr 08, 2010 11:30 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Postby Mlou » Wed Apr 07, 2010 1:07 pm

Great one, Olsen...Feel like I'm there watching. A bit of the mystic there too. Is there a better way of expressing it than "geographical past"? I'm not sure. I want something else/more but not sure what.
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Postby Mlou » Wed Apr 07, 2010 1:29 pm

#1

AIR-CONDITIONED HOTEL

"Shut in from all the world without.."
Wrote Whittier, of snowbound days,
But just those words "shut in" raise doubt
In my little claustrophobic ways.
Oh, give me air and give me light.
Don't close me in the merest closet.
I'll scream and rave and act a fright.
Give me windows that ope...or return my deposit!
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Postby mae » Thu Apr 08, 2010 11:31 am

Olsen! Scared? It's an imaginary geographical past! You said you'd never been there! Man, you'd have been great at little boy campouts. No need for scary stories. You scare yourself! :roll: :D

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Postby *Elle* » Thu Apr 08, 2010 1:16 pm

I feel like a peach
Sitting on cloud nine
Yet other days all I want to do is curl up under a blanket with a good book.
But today though I slip in and out of reality
Picking out curtains that have shapes on them
For my newly redecorated room
And slipping in and out of the global world
Because Im too lazy to do much else

I left out to words sigh and tentacles. Im sitting in class and needed something to do lol
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Postby mae » Thu Apr 08, 2010 1:18 pm

Stream of consciousness, Elle? Or unconsciousness - since you're in class! :D

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P.S. Dearie, you should be doing our April National Poetry Month challenge!
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Postby *Elle* » Thu Apr 08, 2010 4:44 pm

Yea I ment that lol
And I will:)
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Postby Olsenpotter » Thu Apr 08, 2010 8:32 pm

Mae,
What I meant was that the legacy of my last name scares me. I have such amazing people whose actions changed our family, whose choices gave me the bounty I have today. Because of them I am able to live in this land, I am able to choose to be a poet and a writer and a teacher. I am able to choose who my wife is, I can teach my son that he is free to be whatever he wants.

It scares me to think that I'm not adding to that legacy. That my forefathers and my sons will look at my life one day and say, "you are the weakest link."

I have their last name but what am I doing with it? It's a scary thought.
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Postby mae » Thu Apr 08, 2010 9:01 pm

I know what you mean, Olsen. When I turned 60, I got to thinking about what impact - if any - my life had had on anyone else. I decided that if I wanted to make a difference somewhere, I'd better get cracking!

You're at a stage in life where the days get so busy, the hours are gone before you've had a chance to turn around. Don't be too hard on yourself. Sometimes being a good husband and a good dad are the best things you can be. Work hard at those things and the rest is a bonus.

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Postby Mlou » Thu Apr 08, 2010 9:34 pm

Hey, we can't all be trailbreakers. Some of us have to clean up after those who blaze new trails, to build on what they slashed open, to make it work and make it good. That's just plain labor, no glory, but necessary. Maybe even more important than those who are remembered for daring deeds. IMO
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Postby mae » Fri Apr 09, 2010 1:34 am

Generals don't get to be generals without the grunts, huh, mlou?

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Postby mae » Fri Apr 09, 2010 5:37 am

Posting the poem for challenge #2 on the April Poetry Challenge thread. Here's the link

http://www.wordtrip.com/phpBB2/viewtopi ... 089#211089
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