TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 3-3-09

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TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 3-3-09

Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 03, 2009 10:43 am

1. This week let's try the "thing" Paul G. has named Mlou-ku and which I thought we might call "flash poetry"...sort of like flash fiction, but shorter.
Write a short poem...20 words or less...that tells a story. Ex:

"The crumpled note is blue flame.
From dying ashes a whisper
of broken love."

2. Our perennial favorite, the word list, from which to fashion a poem of any length or style.
brush, tangerine, flow, puddle, boundary, cover, sense, stem, startle, chamber

3. I recently heard a song sung by Paul Potts, "Time To Say Goodbye". What poetic thoughts does this suggest to you?
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...


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Postby mae » Tue Mar 03, 2009 12:45 pm

#3

A Good-bye Kiss


Ebbing seas give a last kiss
to the pebbles on the beach
and foam remains like the feel
of a hand resting on a cheek.
Full of salty tears, the sea knows
it's time to say good-bye.

A child grows
and wings stretch
taking in the sky.
Sunlight beckons,
life calls;
it's time to say good-bye.

More of my life's been spent with you
than days of my life without.
Our story's writ, each day a page,
showing what love's about.
How many chapters together have we,
until it's time to say good-by?

All life leads to endings.
The trick is knowing when
it's time to say good-bye.


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Postby mae » Tue Mar 03, 2009 12:46 pm

#1


Broken glass scattered
across the highway,
bounded by black-crayoned
skid marks,
ends abruptly at impact.
Impacted vehicles;
impacted lives.


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My heart beats in poetry. I think in rhythm and dream in rhyme.



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Postby mae » Tue Mar 03, 2009 12:57 pm

#2



brush, tangerine, flow, puddle, boundary, cover, sense, stem, startle, chamber

I, the Watercolor Painter

The brush releases
a tangerine sky
flowing into a muddy puddle.
Ignoring all boundaries,
against common sense
it covers mountains,
color run amok.
Unable to stem its unruly tide,
the startled artist seeks solace
within his chamber,
soothing his drowned imagination.

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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 03, 2009 2:27 pm

Wow, mae, you're swift today! :-D I won't read them until after I write whatever mine will turn out to be.
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Postby Olsenpotter » Wed Mar 04, 2009 2:04 pm

Lonely Boy

A cardboard box came in the mail today
from REALLOVER.com.
I've been too scared to open it;
I'm afriad of dolls.
I'll leave you a note in the freezer.
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Postby Olsenpotter » Wed Mar 04, 2009 2:08 pm

Mae,
I love your poems. This isn't the place to do a critique but I wanted you to know that I thought you did a great job.

Your word list poems reminds me of a Beetles song, "Lucy in the sky with Diamonds". They talk about tangerine trees and marmalade skies.

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Postby PaulG » Wed Mar 04, 2009 4:49 pm

An attempt at one plus three.

Too many lives gone too quickly
We assumed incorrectly
There would always be
Time enough to say goodbye.
...and every now & then I spend my time at rhyme & verse & curse those faults in me...- "Along Comes Mary"- The Association

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Postby Jaelle Hadassah » Wed Mar 04, 2009 9:47 pm

Praying
------------
he knelt on one knee
as if to propose
but no one to see
only God knows
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Postby mslover » Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:50 pm

Good challenges Mlou! I think I need to do as you do and write before I read everyone's contributions....

Memory

passion, once stirred,
flames crimson then
quietly subsides,
glowing embers cool
turning ashen,
disappearing in the wind.
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"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby mslover » Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:55 pm

and another of the "20 or less" - this image came to me while walking to the bus today. does it tell a complete story?

Truth

She paints her life
in shades of gray
with an occasional
crimson or coral poppy.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 05, 2009 11:25 am

Great, ms. The second is more to the "story" vein. The first is more of an observation (from experience, I assume :twisted: ). To be clear, I think you need your comma's moved around:
Passion once stirred ...this says once upon a time passion stirred
Passion, once stirred, flames crimson then quietly subsides. Glowing embers cool, turning ashen... this tells a tale too true. :wink:

Yes, I wait because I don't want to be influenced...or intimidated :D .
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 06, 2009 3:49 pm

#2

RED FOX
Against a westering sun, his brush
was haloed in tangerine light.
Sensing my presence, he flowed to cover
in puddled shadow where tall pines
had grown a chamber roofed with sky.
Stems of wildflowers forgotten in my hands,
I put on stillness like a cloak,
lest he be startled.
For that one breathless moment
boundaries between us ceased to be.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...





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Postby mslover » Fri Mar 06, 2009 4:07 pm

thanks mlou... i've edited per your input. does work better!

nice observations in your poem...

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 06, 2009 4:07 pm

#3 Time to say goodbye

IRIS
I didn't know it was our last farewell
That day I called her in the afternoon.
We laughed and chatted long on trivial things
And in the morning she was gone...too soon.
Friend of so many years, my birthday twin,
Her well-loved voice would tell me not to cry
And so I smile at memories and feel
So grateful I'd had time to say goodbye.
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Postby mslover » Fri Mar 06, 2009 4:11 pm

PaulG wrote:An attempt at one plus three.

Too many lives gone too quickly
We assumed incorrectly
There would always be
Time enough to say goodbye.


nicely done Paul.

mae... lovely as usual and wow did you jump quick this week. :)

olsonpotter - nice to see you! well done.

jaelle - welcome! nice to see so many participants this week. keep 'em comin'!

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 06, 2009 9:17 pm

Good job, everyone! Hope we have more still to come.
Mae, I especially liked your "time to say goodbye."
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Postby Jaelle Hadassah » Sat Mar 07, 2009 9:28 pm

thanks :)
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Postby mslover » Sun Mar 08, 2009 1:24 am

masterpiece

brush in hand,
colors flow on paper
no boundary of thought
no sense of purposeful direction,
but puddles of tincture
pooling from chambers of her soul,
(tangerine stems across the page)
startling volumes of pigment
to hide the emptiness.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 08, 2009 5:49 pm

Ah, good one, ms. I love the word lists because it's so great to see how differently everyone is inspired.
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