TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 02/04/09

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TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 02/04/09

Postby mslover » Wed Feb 04, 2009 10:52 pm

New week, new challenges, new opportunities! Let's see some action in here! Here are three for you to work with:

1. Word list: eclipse, mirror, compel, taste, sigh, bloom, courage

2. Use the following for inspiration... where does it take you? what does it invoke in you?

"i've complained so hard
you don't remember the laughter"

3. Let's try a "Minute" poem:

The Minute Poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4 syllables. The rhyme scheme is as follows: aabb, ccdd, eeff

Example:

I Need Someone

I need someone to hold me tight
Through dark of night,
Who won’t go ’way
At break of day.

Someone whose love will mend the seams
Of broken dreams,
And give me back
The trust I lack.

For love, it holds the magic key
To set me free,
To heal my soul
And make me whole.


all right then poets... let's see whatcha got!

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby mae » Thu Feb 05, 2009 1:13 am

#2

The First Day


It was so long ago,
the day we met.
So long ago, it's obscured
by the frosts of time.

You've changed since then.
But then,
so have I,
in good ways and bad.

Our first day is frozen
in my memory.
When did my heart
freeze, too?

We used to play
and laugh.
But the laughter stopped
when life moved in.
Business, kids, age
brought pressures
and nothing seemed funny
anymore.

We used to touch,
soft, lingering
touches.
When did your love
grow brittle
like leaves on the ground
in January?

Life has grown so big,
swallowing us up
as it grew.
Perhaps,
if we both turn around,
we can look back and see
our first day.




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Postby mae » Fri Feb 06, 2009 12:40 pm

#1 Word List

CORONA

Like viewing a sun's eclipse
through a mirror,
the lengthening shadows
of long-time love
compel me to reflect.
To recall the taste
of quickened passion's kiss;
to breathe again the sigh
of dreams fulfilled;
and feel heat bloom
once more on my cheeks.
But like the glow surrounding
the darkened sun,
the brightest part remains.
As the shadows deepen
and more of life becomes a memory,
courage lies in the flaming edge.


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Postby mslover » Fri Feb 06, 2009 1:00 pm

mae... looks like you have the "love" poetry covered this week. maybe i better branch out! lol love the first stanza of The First Day - sad but lovely and the phrasing in Corona - nicely done. "to breath again the sigh of dreams fulfilled"....

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby Mlou » Fri Feb 06, 2009 6:33 pm

#l

How we are eclipsed
by the shadows of years.
They drift in unnoticed,
until the mirror compels us
to acknowledge them.
We taste late autumn's bitter fruit
and sigh for remembered
sweetness.
Take heart from the rose
that blooms in October.
It has the courage to spend itself
while time remains.
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Postby Mlou » Fri Feb 06, 2009 7:08 pm

#3

I view you with an inner eye
As years go by.
I look within
Your weathered skin.

While time has made your shoulders bow
A little now,
They are the lee
That shelters me.

No matter what appears to be,
I've memory.
See you I will
My young love still.
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Postby mae » Fri Feb 06, 2009 9:09 pm

mlou, tsk, tsk, where are your titles? You have unnamed twins here!

They are both beautiful, by the way. Especially, oh especially, the second. "See you I will/My young love still." It's rather like listening to Yoda talk, but somehow, it works and works wonderfully.

It seems we both have age and time with our old men on our minds.

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Postby Mlou » Fri Feb 06, 2009 9:12 pm

We do, don't we? :) I feel so blessed that he's still here (so many close calls!)
Titles? I'm thinking about them. Nothing quite satisfied me.
Oops. I forgot to put the # of the challenge in also.
I'm going to read yours now, mae.
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Postby Mlou » Fri Feb 06, 2009 9:19 pm

Oh, mae, I like them both but there's a shadow of sadness in the first, as though the love is no longer there, which I know isn't true for you. It's just different now. Corona is my favorite. I especially like the 3 lines with the comparison to the darkened sun and bright edge.
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Postby mae » Fri Feb 06, 2009 9:57 pm

I wanted sadness to come through on that first one, so I'm glad you got that. And yes, the love is still there, just different.

I'm glad you went back and put in the challenge numbers. I got the word list one, but I thought that #3 poem was for the #2 challenge. I went back and read it after you put in the number, and, yup, there it is!

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Postby Mlou » Sat Feb 07, 2009 11:29 am

#2 (With apologies to ol' blue eyes)

REFRAIN
Complaints, I've had a few
But then again too few to mention...
Some small discord but great reward
In our life without dissention...
And laughter's cup that bubbles up
So unexpectedly,
The joy it brings...My spirit sings
"Lucky, lucky me!"
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Postby mslover » Sat Feb 07, 2009 11:00 pm

#1

Reflection

courage lined face,
soft sighs breathed
though bloom prevailed,
not eclipsed by pain
she passed uneasy in the night.

compelled to remember,
her image and mine,
mingle in my mirror
as if she lives on
and yet tastes life's sweetness.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby mae » Sun Feb 08, 2009 12:06 am

mslover, that's lovely. Is it about your mother?

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Postby mslover » Sun Feb 08, 2009 12:12 am

yes it is mae. everyone who knew her gushes over how much we look alike. i still miss her like crazy.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
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Postby Mlou » Sun Feb 08, 2009 10:44 am

Ms, you reminded me of this poem of mine that was published in the Vermont Country Sampler:

LOST AND FOUND

Nothing loved is lost. It will remain
Faintly sometimes, like footprints in the grass.
A memory, a whisper, an echo comes again...
I see my mother's face in the looking glass.
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Postby Mlou » Mon Feb 09, 2009 1:04 pm

We're missing some poets here. :) Where is everybody?
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Postby mslover » Tue Feb 10, 2009 9:25 pm

personally i still want to do the other two challenges but since it is a new week... i better get to posting the new week's challenge first! :D

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

"Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it's about learning how to dance in the rain."

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