TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 7-8-08

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TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 7-8-08

Postby Mlou » Tue Jul 08, 2008 8:06 am

It's Tuesday. Time to flex those poetry muscles.

1. We haven't tried a list poem in a while. What poem will you make from these words?
short, violet, finish, flash, corner, fade, wing, happen, burst, keep

2. Take one tiny object from your surroundings and build a poem around it.

3. Do you have a favorite, song, hymn, piece of music? A poem please on how it makes you feel, or what thoughts it inspires in you.
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Postby LizGrayson » Tue Jul 08, 2008 3:32 pm

Using (most of) the list and weeding through half a dozen inspirations....including Beethovan, Sylvia Plath and The Twilight Zone.

Still needs a title :roll: :roll: :roll:

A violet fugue
Played upon my vision

(Closing in)

A short burst of happening, of
Color rippling but going nowhere.

A violet fugue
Played upon my mind

(Closing in)

A metronomic wing beating
Against unconscious cognizance.

A violet fugue
Played against my heart

(Closing in)

An incomplete sentience begging
For the flash of recogntion.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Jul 08, 2008 3:40 pm

Excellent, Liz!
I forgot to specify (because we haven't had a word list in some time) that ideally the poet uses ALL the words in the list, and to make it more difficult still, may choose to use them in the right order. :-D Nothing like making a challenge a CHALLENGE! But I definitely like what you did with it.
Title? At Twilight??? Speaking of twilight zone.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Jul 08, 2008 3:58 pm

THIS MOMENT

In the short violet hour
when day finishes its run
and the last flash of sun
touches the corner where I sit,
I fade with the dying light.
The beat of time's wing
flutters close, grows heavy
with portents of happenings to come.
But I feel a swift burst of joy
that I may keep the things
of this world, holding them close
for yet a little while.
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Postby JillStar » Tue Jul 08, 2008 5:14 pm

Stress to Nausea

Please see my writing blog for this poem.

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Postby Mlou » Tue Jul 08, 2008 5:27 pm

Hi, Jill...great job! I should have remembered sooner how we all like the word lists. Hope everyone chimes in.
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Postby PaulG » Tue Jul 08, 2008 9:39 pm

Well, I got all the words in and in order.

Those Eyes

I sat near a short woman with jet-black hair and dazzling violet eyes.
As she reached to finish her drink I had partially turned away.
The flash of her exquisite smile I saw in the corner of my eye.
Before I could join her she was gone, into the crowd she did fade.
My feet took wing in hot pursuit, but to meet her was not to happen.
I burst through the door just in time to see a cab steal her away.
I forever keep in my mind those violet eyes and that radiant smile.
A picture framed forever with a wrinkle of what might have been.
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Postby Mlou » Wed Jul 09, 2008 9:52 am

That you did, Paul! :) Fun, isn't it?
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Postby LizGrayson » Wed Jul 09, 2008 3:57 pm

Wonderful contributions all around:)

I know I cheated but when you combine Beethovan and The Twilight Zone with a little Sylvia Plath, it's a miracle your brain doesn't implode.
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Postby Saphyre » Wed Jul 09, 2008 11:13 pm

A Life so Short.

Tag, flow, card, cross'ex.
Tournament. Victory. Flowers.
The high of injustices and pride.
He looks so good in black.
League, Invitationals... pre-quals, quals.
Baby breath, tulips, violets, roses.
The images blur and combine in one long string of triumph.
Seated. Tried. The perfect finish.
We inspire fear together.
Anxiety, mounting anguish, and an uncontainable roar.
Our corner of the world shaking.
An eve of high-fives and well-dones.
The dance is tradition. My heart hears something more.
The unending thundering, the thrill that will not fade.
His eyes are blue, his smile wide;
My heart it has grown wings.
Pride, love, and victory merge and swell and overflow.
We are alone in this moment of the world.
The break, the gasp of breath, the boldness burst and gone.
Love's life so short,
Victory's taste so sweet.
The kiss is forever ours to keep.
Last edited by Saphyre on Thu Jul 10, 2008 3:16 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Jul 10, 2008 8:55 am

Interesting theme, saphyre. Pointing out similarities about fame, love and life...all so fleeting. As you asked for crit, I'd suggest you might consider editing for repetition....
the high of thrill/ the unending thrill...our corner of the world/this corner of the world...my flying heart/heart has wings
I would eliminate lines 2 and 3 and 10 as they just slow the flow of the piece.
A reference here and there isn't clear. Why "injustice"? And why "we inspire fear together"? Why would you, or the athlete, inspire fear and in whom?
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Postby Saphyre » Thu Jul 10, 2008 3:14 pm

it's interesting that you keyed on the comparisions, because i wasn't thinking of comparing them when i started, that just came in on its own. I was actually writing about a debate tournment. She and her partner just won Nationals, that's what the line about cards, flow, tags, and cross-ex is. they're all debate terms. also, that's the injustice line- most topics deal with "Resolved: that ______ in _____ is just/unjust". (for example: Resolved, that the death penalty in the united states is unjust.) It also has to do with the sensation of walking out of a round and knowing you will have won if the lay judge is fair and understood the round. Inspire fear is hearing people MOAN when they see that you're their opponents. it's a sweet feel. there are some teams that just LOOK scary together.
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Postby mslover » Sat Jul 12, 2008 9:23 pm

violet twilight finds me
short of originality,
unable to finish a sentence
bursting to find my words,
yet keeping them from me
falling short
uncertain to how it happened.

no wings on which to fly
i fade away
hiding in corners~
your thoughts, your ideas,
your preconceived notions of life
becoming mine,
i lose my identity
in your flashes of brilliance.


to everyone... wnicely done. wonderful to see you bringing your poetry back. we've missed you!

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Postby Mlou » Sat Jul 12, 2008 9:35 pm

It's great everyone is turning out for the poetry challenge! And we still have mae to hear from... :-D
I love what you all did with the list. So many completely different thoughts from one small list of words. I'll bet you surprise yourselves sometimes with what comes out of a list.
ms, first rate job on how someone can be influenced and overshadowed by a more forceful personality.

NOW HOW ABOUT THE OTHER SUGGESTIONS :?: :?:
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Postby mslover » Sat Jul 12, 2008 9:42 pm

giggle...mlou...you're just the taskmaster aren't you! i looked around for something small but found the only "item" i wanted to possibly right about was his car - that high maintenance mistress that occupies his time, his thoughts and both our paychecks! sigh... :shock:

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Postby Mlou » Sat Jul 12, 2008 9:56 pm

What? Nothing in your vicinity like a pencil, a safety pin, some loose change, a broken fingernail, a postcard, a cellphone, a, a, a,?
Plus a lot of people here post about what song they're listening to at the moment. Hmmmmm?
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Postby mae » Tue Jul 15, 2008 2:26 am

This is challenge #1 - written in descriptive words, but without use of actual adjectives.

short, violet, finish, flash, corner, fade, wing, happen, burst, keep

A DESCRIPTION OF SUNSET

The day shortens and the sky changes hue
to one I describe as me missing you.

It shares the violet of my store of fears,
washed clean by the flashing flood of tears.

Turning the corner of day into night,
the sun fades and flies on wings of light.

As ever it happens, my heart bursts in two
as twilight departs leaving thoughts of you.

It descends through purples, keeps falling to black,
where it finally is lost and cannot come back.

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Postby mae » Tue Jul 15, 2008 2:53 am

And here is my entry for chalenge 2

Affixed and Asphyxiated

Lurking on the shelf just above my head
is a dispenser of tape that wishes me dead.
It sits there waiting, knowing I'll need it someday
when it will seize its chance and innocence betray.
It's longing to wrap me in miles of stickiness
and squeeze and squeeze 'til I've no more airiness.
Around my head it will twine and twist
until finally I crack and scream "Desist!"
Then with a smarmy leer, 'twill unwind,
leaving me shaken and gasping and fearfully inclined
to suspect tape in dispensers and even in rolls
of plotting my demise and stealing my soul!

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Postby Mlou » Tue Jul 15, 2008 8:26 am

Terrific job, mae!
I love what you did with #1 and the humor in #2 is great.
Now on to a new week's challenge. :twisted:
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Postby Saphyre » Tue Jul 15, 2008 12:48 pm

mae- i don't think i've laughed in a week like i did on 2. and one... i really liked the ending. overall, well-done.
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Postby *Elle* » Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:09 pm

Hey Guys

I like all of your poems and hope to be posting mine soon. Have a good day!
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