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Posted: Thu Sep 07, 2006 2:52 pm
by Mlou
Me too...it has a poignant sadness to it that you hate to think might apply to you. And actually, it doesn't appy to me...because I'm already way past it. :-D

Posted: Thu Sep 07, 2006 5:09 pm
by Alabaster Muse
Mudge wrote:
The curse of having given in to life--
Of feeling passion's tendrils, icy-hot--
Is felt at first in distant echoes of
A heart that beat for love but now does not.

When youth is spent and nothing warm remains
Save mem'ries pulled around me like a cloak,
I shiver as my solace entertains
The punchline of this ancient cosmic joke.

If hearts can die, can souls be far behind?
Should I retreat to instinct, like a bug?
Despite my vaunted talent, I am blind,
And aching for the grave my hope has dug.

So free at dawn . . . yet not half-way to dusk
I stand revealed as Adam's soulless husk

...........................

I didn't mean to crush your mouth
So sweetly and ferociously against mine
That your lips are bruised and your tongue is swollen
And your face is practically raw from the stubble on my chin
But I like
The flat spot right at the small of your back
That makes it so easy
To pull you closer.

And

I didn't mean to make you late for dinner
When I tugged your jeans down over your hips
Leaving us both sweaty and disheveled
And omygod we're supposed to be there now!
But I like
That tender hollow at the front of your hip
That makes it so easy
To want to explore further.

And

I didn't mean to rip open our hearts
When I tried to pull you out of your shell
When I tried to get behind your eyes
Which somehow got you through my walls
But I like
you.
Which is not making this
Any easier at all.


I haven't visited WT in ages, and I stop by to find this. It has reduced me to tears, Mudge, convincing me that I am human after all, and beneath all the rubble of my life lies a heart that is still beating. Thank you.

May I print these off and put them in my paper journal? And if you would like your name added, pm me and I will be happy to add it.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 10:49 am
by TheMudge
This is a song, so the meter might seem a little off.

It’s something of a no-win situation
But no one ever said that love was safe
Close your heart and wallow in frustration
Or lay it on the line and watch it break
A life-defining balance that we constantly adjust:
Love or Bust.
Love or Bust.

So every time you think you hear love calling
You end up lipsticked from a Judas kiss
Your heart gets broke so often it’s appalling
And you argue if it’s even worth the risk
You can’t let go of pain when it’s the only thing you trust
Love or Bust.
Love or Bust.

Love or Bust: You’ll get there or you won’t
All or nothing: give your heart of don’t
Play out your excuses if you must
It’s just
Love or Bust

I wish there was a way to make this smoother
I wish I had an answer that made sense
Any path I choose I’m still the loser
‘til I want to slit my wrists in self-defense
Dancing on the wire between dementia and disgust
Love or Bust.
Love or Bust.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 10:54 am
by pengwenn
I really like the second verse.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 11:27 am
by TheMudge
Actually, the 2nd verse was the one I wrote first.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 11:35 am
by pengwenn
Well, it did have the greatest emotional impact . . . for me anyway. The last line "You can’t let go of pain when it’s the only thing you trust" is enough to send me into therapy.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 11:53 am
by TheMudge
My work here is finished. :D

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 12:06 pm
by pengwenn
I'll send you the bill.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:04 pm
by Mlou
Is it going to be sung by the composer on Chas' ipod thingie? :-D
Very emotion rousing, natural yet consistently rhymed. I did itch to put "it's just" right after "if you must" (in the same line) and then repeat the "Love or bust" twice as you did in all the other verses. And I agree with PW...they're all great but the 2nd one is "the greatest"!

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:08 pm
by charlesp
Mlou wrote:Is it going to be sung by the composer on Chas' ipod thingie? :-D


Now THAT is a cool idea... "And now it's time for emotional songs with Mudge, the part of the show were Mudge comes out and sings an emotional song" Mudge + Guitar...

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:24 pm
by xcheck24
That's so emo, charles

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:31 pm
by TheMudge
Ah, me demanding public . . .

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:41 pm
by charlesp
xcheck24 wrote:That's so emo, charles


that too... though I was going for the VeggieTales mid-show song... but don't expect too many in this crowd to catch that one.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 2:41 pm
by xcheck24
ugh. . .veggietales. . .shoot me

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 3:02 pm
by charlesp
Veggietales are, thusfar, the only christian kid's videos I've ever seen that I can actually enjoy (heck, the only ones I can tolerate in any dose really)... though they won me over early with the french peas taunting from their castle (Jericho).... monty python reference = free points from charles.

Posted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 3:10 pm
by xcheck24
i missed that one. that one would actually make me laugh.

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 10:09 am
by TheMudge
I don't miss you badly
In fact, I'm doing it quite well . . .
Knowing you're the best I've ever had:

I don't miss you badly
I miss you BAD.

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 10:56 am
by Mlou
How bad IS that?

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 11:16 am
by JillStar
Interesting play on words there... sounds like you're missing this person without problem in doing so. Then, at the end, sounds like she (I'm assuming) has some how changed. As if she use to be "one way" and now she's another way and you miss the way she was. Does that make sense? Although I think I'm making the ending into something it's not... I think it could mean a couple things. It could even mean "you" missing her is what's bad. Hmmm...

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 11:17 am
by TheMudge
I don't know. Haven't found the rest of the song yet.

Just annoys me when people take a predicate adjective ("I feel bad") and add "ly" because they think it's proper grammar . . . but what they're really doing is turning it into an adverb modifying the verb. Technically, "I feel badly" really means one is doing a lousy job of feeling.

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 11:46 am
by Mlou
Yeah but think of the fun you have while learning to do it goodly! :twisted:

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 12:29 pm
by TheMudge
that's my next poem

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 12:57 pm
by LilacWine
Well done, Mudge.

Now could you please address my pet peeve of misplaced apostrophes?

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 3:22 pm
by Mlou
And there-their-they're

Posted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 6:41 pm
by Anblick
Mlou wrote:And there-their-they're


Ah, my nemesis (along with Your-You're)...