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Postby TheMudge » Fri Dec 10, 2010 12:00 pm

You smugly label him
An eccentric genius:
Brilliant, but hopelessly out of step
With the Professional World.

But what you call "out of step",
I call "authentic";

Where you see "genius",
I see simply the courage to go against the norm;

And what you call "professional",
I call an embarrassment:
An excuse to pander to the god of mediocrity ...
To set your sights on the safely corporate…
To cower at the feet of an insidious banality:
"But we've always done it this way!"
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Postby xcheck24 » Sun Dec 12, 2010 9:12 pm

I can relate to that.
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:29 pm

Yeah, I was in a mood that mornng
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Postby pengwenn » Mon Dec 27, 2010 4:55 pm

I'm fighting that last line here at work right now. Too many people have been here too long that they can't seem to understand why their work should change. "If they didn't want this information captured in the past why do it now." It's a good thing the walls in my cube are padded.
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Jan 12, 2011 12:18 pm

I wish that I could give you
Everything your heart desires;
The truth is, I ain't got that much to give.
I wish I had an island
Where we both could retire ...
These days I barely make enough to live.
I have a million reasons
Why I'm just not worth your while
But there is one point I'm trying to make clear:
If you ever give me
Half a chance to make you smile
I will love you for forever and a year.

I wish that I could give you
Happy children of your own
But God knows I can't raise another kid;
Or change myself into
Someone your family would condone ...
(You prob'ly wouldn't like me if I did).
I wish that I could get back
All the time I've spent 'til now,
Hoping that someday you would appear ...
I kinda hate to say it but I'll say it anyhow:
I will love you for forever and a year

We both know I don't have a lot to give you ...
Mostly heartache, every now and then a tear ...
My love may be a curse
But for now, for what it's worth
I will love you for forever and a year.

I would love to tell you that I always will be there
We both know that's a promise I can't keep;
I can't even promise that I'll always have my hair
(So I sure hope this is more than just skin deep!)
There may come a time when I can't recognize your face
So come and let me whisper in your ear
The only honest argument I have to make my case:
I will love you for forever and a year
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Postby mae » Wed Jan 12, 2011 12:31 pm

Mudge, your poem brought tears to my eyes. I don't know the backstory of it, but it makes me think of a couple of stories I heard recently of couples who were deeply in love when they were young but for some reason separated. They married other people, raised families and then, fortuitously, met again. One couple renewed their relationship, the other are just friends.

Mechanically, I think you've done a great job. Mlou would probably not like the long lines, but I do because they make the piece conversational. It's easy to read it without meter with those long lines. You've also done a great job at rhyming. Only once or twice did I even notice the rhyme. Very well done.

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Postby TheMudge » Wed Jan 12, 2011 12:52 pm

Thanks, mae. It's meant to be a song. It kinda started as one thing and split off somewhere else, and actually I have ANOTHER song on ANOTHER tangent that I am working on, too ...
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Postby mae » Wed Jan 12, 2011 6:30 pm

A song, huh? Well, I'd have to hear it. Most lyrics, it seems to me, are far more repetitious than this, but as a gentle ballad, it might work beautifully.

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Postby TheMudge » Thu Jan 13, 2011 6:01 pm

yeah. wish I had the ability to play what is in my head.
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Postby Mlou » Sun Feb 06, 2011 9:59 am

Mudge, there's a songwriter who's having a contest just now on Allpoetry...looking for lyrics.
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Dec 21, 2012 10:07 pm

My heart is split in two equal pieces:
One’s up north, and one’s in Tennessee.
And I feel like a dunce – Can’t be with both at once –
And it’s slowly surely cruelly killing me.

So I spend a lot of time out on this highway –
Back and forth, as often as I can.
They both know, and they’re OK – Or at least that's what they say –
So it’s only me who doesn’t understand ...

What change can I make?
Heaven only knows what all’s at stake
Where do I begin
To make my heart whole again?

All my energy goes into limbo,
And I’m afraid I’ll someday disappear.
Bad memories and pain will be all that remain:
I’ll slip out between a punchline and a tear ...

There are morning when that’s all that I can think of;
But I somehow know it’s not my life to end.
So I try to do what’s right – run on into the night –
Get up tomorrow, do it all again.

What change can I make?
Heaven only knows what all’s at stake
Where do I begin
To make my heart whole again?

Tired, and wired and uninspired –
Ain't that what the poet said?
Some days it seems there’s nothing left to do
But put a bullet through my head,
Draw the curtains, say good night, and take my final bow ...
... but if all I sought was an easy out,
I would have gone that way by now.

What change can I make?
Heaven only knows what all’s at stake
Where do I begin
To make my heart whole ... ?
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Postby Mlou » Sat Dec 22, 2012 3:00 pm

I think you may just be a wee bit late for that song writing contest! :D Good job, though!
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Postby TheMudge » Sat Dec 22, 2012 7:21 pm

Thanks. Been doing a little too much of that writing of late ...
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Postby JillStar » Mon Jan 07, 2013 9:47 pm

I like this Mudge... haven't heard from you in a long while and hope things are okay.

In answer to the poem/song's question... leave them both behind and find someone new... that way you aren't pulled between the two. Nothing like adding more stew to the pot. ;)

Of course, life isn't that easy.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Jan 08, 2013 9:59 am

Thanks J ... but since the "two" in question are both my sons ... kinda hard to just walk away from that ...
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Postby JillStar » Thu Jan 10, 2013 4:10 pm

I see... it's not really clear that it's your sons you're talking. I guess it's one of those situations where someone can take it a few different ways.
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Postby TheMudge » Sun Jan 20, 2013 6:28 pm

Well, yeah. a lot of my songs end up that way ...
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Postby Olsenpotter » Fri Jan 25, 2013 9:41 am

Mudge,

I love this. I've never had to make any kind of choice like this but the emotions you evoke here literally made me feel what that would be like.

Personally I think the best line in this song/poem is the

Bad memories and pain will be all that remain:
I’ll slip out between a punchline and a tear ...

You convey so much fear and yet understanding of how people deal with their pain. One of those "Oh yeah, that good for nothing" jokes. You conjure up one of these two people (be son, lover, whomever) sitting at dinner with friends when the subject comes up and they play it off when really they are still hurt. I really like the simplicity but complexity of that line.

The only thing that really stick out at me is the "Slowly surely cruelly killing me" line in the 1st stanza. Something about that line seems off to me. I say that, but now that it's written, I like the idea of the speaker compounding the thought. It's something that is constantly getting closer and closer to the final act so he feels the need to add more as he speaks. I changed my mind. I like it.

This bit seems a little backward to me.

Some days it seems there’s nothing left to do
But put a bullet through my head,
Draw the curtains, say good night, and take my final bow ...

How would you do those three things if the bullet is already in your head? If you lost the "and" then it would seem like different metaphors for the act, but with the "and" it seems like action you would perform after you've put the bullet there.

I'm glad I checked in, this was definitely worth the read. Please excuse the critique, I know it wasn't asked for, but its so good I had to say something and I got carried away.
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Postby xcheck24 » Sun Jan 27, 2013 6:42 pm

I log on for the first time in...well, awhile and there's a Mudge poem/song. And, like always, it's a good one.

Hope everything is well.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Feb 05, 2013 9:04 pm

I’m hot, I’m cold; I’m young, I’m old;
I’m a little too careful and a little too bold.
I’m up, I’m down; I’m silent sound;
Looking for an answer that just can’t be found
I know ...
But I can’t take less any more;
A passionate fighter
In somebody else’s war.

And I’m running in place just as fast I can …
Gonna swan-dive up to the sky;
Build castles in the ocean & I swim in the sand:
I’m a Gemini Man …
… and so am I.

I’m white, I’m black; I’m forward-back;
I rule entire kingdoms from a two-room shack.
I’m night, I’m day; nearly far away;
Try to tell you something that I just can’t say
I know…
But I’m bound by the freedom I need:
Doors open around me
But I can’t find the key …

And I’m running in place just as fast I can …
Gonna swan-dive up to the sky;
Build castles in the ocean & I swim in the sand:
I’m a Gemini Man …
… and so am I.
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Postby Hissmonster » Mon Feb 18, 2013 6:52 pm

Hey mudge welcome back
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Postby Hissmonster » Mon Feb 18, 2013 9:16 pm

Any poems for us Mudge?!?
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Feb 18, 2013 9:24 pm

How can love hurt so much?
You're drawing blood each time we touch;
I still want to make you mine
But you're like barb wire drenched in wine.
It's like tryin' to hug a porcupine.

You look so innocent and cute--
With an edge like that the point is moot.
I tried to step across that line,
Just didn’t see the warning sign
It's like tryin' to hug a porcupine.

You are the thorn you are the rose
I split my lip each time we kiss
A broken heart a broken nose
My insurance doesn't cover this ...

Masocistic or insane?
The love you give ain't worth the pain.
If that is that, I guess that's fine
But count me out, 'cause I resign
'Cause it's like tryin' to hug a porcupine.
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Postby Hissmonster » Mon Feb 18, 2013 9:29 pm

Troubled waters?

I love the imagery of "barbed wire drenched in wine" and your second last stanza is my favorite!
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Feb 18, 2013 9:31 pm

Actually, most of the trouble has already happened. And that one wasn't aimed at anyone in particular ... I just heard that line and built a song around it.
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