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Postby xcheck24 » Thu Sep 13, 2007 2:56 pm

Al Gore sings?! Is there nothing that man can't do?!
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Postby mslover » Thu Sep 13, 2007 3:14 pm

hmmm... i'd love to hear the melody it goes to.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

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Postby mae » Thu Sep 13, 2007 11:39 pm

If you use the term VERY loosely, you can call what Al Gore does'singing.''

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Postby TheMudge » Thu Mar 05, 2009 10:40 am

Your breath
Hanging in the air like some delicious mix
Of honeysuckle and jasmine
Covers me like a fog
Settles dew-like on my skin
Digs into my scalp
Like fleas.

Your voice
Tenderly echoing off the hushed velvet sky
Like summer rain
Surrounds me like a lullaby
Enfolds me like a lover
Pierces my brain
Like a steak knife.

Your hands
Innocently earnestly holding me
Like God holding a mystery
Like a mother holding a baby
Like a child holding a butterfly
Right before ripping off the wings
So it can never fly away.
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Postby PaulG » Thu Mar 05, 2009 10:54 am

Mudge- That was great. I needed and got a good laugh. My kind of poetry. :lol:
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 05, 2009 11:28 am

Yikes, Mudge! Bad day with the missus? :shock:
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Postby TheMudge » Thu Mar 05, 2009 12:24 pm

Hey, some people use therapy ... I use poetry ...
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 05, 2009 12:25 pm

Whatever works, right? :)
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Postby TheMudge » Thu Mar 05, 2009 1:15 pm

gotta get rid o' dem ol' demons somehows
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Postby pengwenn » Fri Mar 06, 2009 11:40 am

Yeah, but does she read your poetry? That could be scary.
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Postby mslover » Fri Mar 06, 2009 4:13 pm

TheMudge wrote:Hey, some people use therapy ... I use poetry ...


as do i.... sometimes it really does help exorcise those "demons" - and sometimes it just gets me to a place where i can at least cope with life instead of wallowing in feeling sorry for myself for not having done all that i had hoped.

"Winter must be cold for those with no warm memories - we've already missed the spring"

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Postby xcheck24 » Fri Mar 06, 2009 10:22 pm

pengwenn wrote:Yeah, but does she read your poetry? That could be scary.


If he's a smart writer, she doesn't.

Damn, the butterfly imagery. . .Best part.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Mar 10, 2009 7:41 pm

pengwenn wrote:Yeah, but does she read your poetry? That could be scary.


She? She who? The person to whom the poem is directed? Actually that is a composite of a couple old girlfriends. And no, they don't.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 10, 2009 8:44 pm

I always said the Mudge was canny. Now if he just can convince the little lady. :wink:
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Postby JT » Tue Mar 10, 2009 9:43 pm

xcheck24 wrote:Al Gore sings?! Is there nothing that man can't do?!


Yes, he can't be honest about many things.
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Postby JT » Tue Mar 10, 2009 9:49 pm

Mudge,

Wonderful poem. They are so nice at the beginning of each stanza, and then each turns so cruel. Great images at each end that would be sad, but you make them funny. Very nice.

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Postby TheMudge » Wed Mar 11, 2009 2:46 pm

Thanks, JT
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:27 pm

I know that you don't know me, and I only like to think that I know you
But I think I see enough to know that just like me you're tired of this zoo
And I'm not one to jump right in, especially when the water looks too deep
I'm open to suggestions 'cause it's way too late to look before I leap

Is it any wonder that the world raced on and left us here alone?
And norm'ly if I'm lonely, well, my feeling is, I'd rather be alone
But maybe for a change I could be noticed for the company I keep
Yeah, that's an invitation, 'cause it's way too late to look before I leap
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Postby Mlou » Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:30 pm

Hey, Mudge...that was a loooong sabbatical you took! Welcome back....
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Oct 19, 2009 7:59 pm

yeah, had dig through a lot just to find the ol' dump ...

How're YOU feeling?
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Postby pengwenn » Mon Oct 19, 2009 10:10 pm

Yeah, I was thinking it's been a long time since you "dumped' on us. I like it. Sounds like a song.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Oct 20, 2009 10:07 am

yeah, with a somewhat sketchy melody at this point. But it is a meter/rhythm pattern I've never tried to use ... most of mine fall into iambic pentameter by default ...
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Postby Mlou » Tue Oct 20, 2009 5:23 pm

I find that meter almost impossible to avoid falling into unless I really pay attention to what I'm doing. It's insidious! lol I think it's because my English teacher had a thing for pieces like Gray's Elegy in a Country Churchyard, etc.
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Postby mae » Tue Oct 20, 2009 7:52 pm

I don't know about the rhythm, but I love the wording. It's almost tangly enough to got tangled up in, but not quite. I really liked that Mudge. mae
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Oct 23, 2009 10:20 pm

thank you. I like that description.
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