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Postby TheMudge » Thu Feb 01, 2007 11:30 am

Ah, but see, that's the rub: there are SQUARE waffles and ROUND waffles . . . but they ALL have grids . . .
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Postby Mlou » Thu Feb 01, 2007 4:51 pm

And that's a waffle lot of reasoning. Ah, grids...did you get them wearing a griddle under the spandex? :wink:
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Postby xcheck24 » Thu Feb 01, 2007 5:12 pm

oh god they're going to make this into a pun thread. save us! ;)
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Postby Mlou » Thu Feb 01, 2007 6:44 pm

No, we need the punmeister, Ran, for that. Wish he'd drop in once in a while.
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Feb 02, 2007 9:14 am

You ever hear from him, Mlou?
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Feb 02, 2007 9:41 am

16 Oscar-winning Songs that Don't Suck

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Postby Mlou » Fri Feb 02, 2007 10:54 am

Around Christmas time I got an email from him, Mudge. He promised to look in occasionally but haven't "seen" him.
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Feb 02, 2007 12:17 pm

*sigh*
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Postby TheMudge » Thu Feb 15, 2007 2:40 pm

There's cotton-coated cauliflower
That's posing as my brain
And what I've done would take an hour
And flow-charts to explain.
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Postby JillStar » Thu Feb 15, 2007 3:24 pm

But would your flow-chart, oh so involved
Make my wee brain explode
Or cause unexplained expansions, like
The universe in code.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Feb 15, 2007 4:05 pm

Oh, no! I thought I was safely away from the flow-chart question. Et tu, brute?
And PLEASE, you two, check into the Verse Form thread. I need backup here. :D
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Postby pengwenn » Thu Feb 15, 2007 4:37 pm

I think they've got a poetry tag going on.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Feb 20, 2007 10:13 am

My memories--
The oldest ones--
Are dark.
Like a night with stars but no moon
Like the inside of a tent made with chairs and a heavy wool blanket
Like a room lit only by a single candle . . .
Images are vague at the center
And black at the edges.
No amount of light can pierce the gloom;
The brilliance of a thousand suns merely shows the fog more clearly.
No matter how hard I stare, I cannot focus.
So the dark, flat, murky shapes and almost unheard whispers
Are what remain of my childhood.
Like the last glowing ashes of a camp fire
They once told a story
But now quietly smile, content to hold their mystery.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Feb 20, 2007 1:57 pm

I like it, Mudge. Dark, of course. :)
Do you need "So the dark..."? Or just "Flat, murky shapes and faint whispers..."
And...i'm being picky here...last embers might glow, but ashes are dead, aren't they?
I don't know why, but the quiet smile doesn't go with the rest of the dark feeling.
Maybe "But now are content to hold their mystery." ?
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Feb 20, 2007 3:29 pm

Do you need "So the dark..."? Or just "Flat, murky shapes and faint whispers..."


Not sure on that one. I like "almost unheard" but the rest of that line isn't right yet. Need to live with it awhile.

And...i'm being picky here...last embers might glow, but ashes are dead, aren't they?


Fought myself on that one, too. But when I think of embers, I think of red hot chunks of wood. But here I wanted the whispery thin pieces of ash, still glowing around the edges. Is that technically an ember?

I don't know why, but the quiet smile doesn't go with the rest of the dark feeling.
Maybe "But now are content to hold their mystery." ?


Agree that it's not quite right, but I don't want them just content . . . I want them SMUG. Taunting, almost. Like, "You could've known this story, but it's too late now."

Which is a lot to ask of ashes . . .
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Postby Daniel » Tue Feb 20, 2007 4:28 pm

A piece from former times. I'm afraid younger people (those who where children in the 80's -not my case) would not understand what are you talking about or at least, they would immediately think of all the technnical means available to learn about someone else's chilhood: from pictures to DVD's, thorugh VHS; even hacking into their CPU, if you can and feel like to. There are many ways to break such a mystery and make it yours. Then, those memories won't smile so quietly. :lol:
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Postby Mlou » Tue Feb 20, 2007 4:44 pm

Well, I'll just have to light our small fireplace tonight and examine the ashes as they are dying. :-D
Flat, murky shapes and almost unheard whispers
are what remain of my childhood.
They once told a story.
Now, like a dying campfire
poised between ember and ash,
their mystery is locked away
behind an enigmatic smile...

or something like that, maybe.
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Postby pengwenn » Tue Feb 20, 2007 5:09 pm

poised between ember and ash


Ooo I like that. I think of embers as still alive (fire-wise of course) but ash as dead. Would work with memories I guess.

I always love your poetry Mudge. Dark and dreary some of it may be it's still beautiful.
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Feb 21, 2007 9:07 am

I like that line, too, Pengy . . . will probably steal it. Thanks, Mlou! :D

And I don't TRY to be dark! It just happens that way!
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Postby charlesp » Wed Feb 21, 2007 9:11 am

you're not naughty, you're just drawn that way right?

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Postby Mlou » Wed Feb 21, 2007 12:25 pm

You've very welcome. :wink:
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Apr 17, 2007 9:20 am

On the wall,
Below the window,
Behind the bed,
Is a long stain;

A dark line
Where a single drop of life,
Escaping from a moment of passion,
Sought refuge
In the paint and plaster.

Warm, vital, and full of possibilities
When it hit; but from there
Slowly meandering south
Losing its purpose
Getting distracted
Diffusing
Cooling
Until it was nothing like itself . . .
Until it was, finally,
Nothing at all.

Kinda like
The you and me
Who were once
Us.
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Postby xcheck24 » Tue Apr 17, 2007 9:33 am

mudge, i always can feel what you write. that's the mark of a great poet.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Apr 17, 2007 9:42 am

Or the mark of an astute reader :D
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Postby xcheck24 » Tue Apr 17, 2007 9:47 am

i dunno about that. there's a guy who goes to my writers group who never understands anyone's poetry, but he says that he can feel what the better poets are saying. . .if that makes sense.
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