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Some Philosophical Poems By Me (Warning, these may suck)

Postby bard_of_life » Fri Jan 27, 2006 8:49 pm

Bleed

The knife digs deep
My blood runs fast
I sigh with relief
I'm free at last

Cut once more
Dig even deeper
Lose myself in pain
Cut myself deeper

Bleeding away the pain
A drop at a time
I left her yesterday
And she's no longer mine

Cut my veins a final time
Pale skin now dyed red
It feels oh so better
Now that I'm almost dead

Bleed away the pain I feel
Cut away the sadness
Now I can slip from loving her
Into sweet, sweet madness


Etch These Words

Etch these words
In the back of my hand
I'm never coming back
No not ever again

The fire has died and
My hearts flame
Has pulled back
And I'm still making up to you
For what we both lack

I've lost myself
In a torrent of sadness
This pain of my love
Is driving me to madness
But I keep looking
And searching and hoping
Hoping that I can find us

Etch these words
In the back of my hand
I'm never coming back
No not ever again


I hoped you liked these... Crit is welcomed but optional, and flaming is unnaceptable, or I will flame you right back. And boy, oh boy can I flame... Hehe.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Jan 28, 2006 12:45 pm

Very expressive, bard! But I hope the first poem is only poetic expression and not literal (that you're not into "cutting".)
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...


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Postby bard_of_life » Sat Jan 28, 2006 5:44 pm

Definitely not Mlou... but I do have some aquaintances who do... I just really hope that I did an accurate portrayal of a cutter...?
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Postby Mlou » Sat Jan 28, 2006 10:27 pm

I'd hope even more that you'd use your friendship to persuade them to get some help/couseling. I know that's easy to say but they CAN be helped.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...





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Postby bard_of_life » Sat Jan 28, 2006 10:42 pm

they don't do it anymore, at least the ones I kno used to... but i have some friends who have life hitting them hard and they might be cutting themselves... I don't know... but that's where almost all of my poems are coming from... :(
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