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Postby wrathofpengy » Thu Dec 15, 2005 8:57 pm

Black black eyes,
red red lips,
the symbol of the fallen
on my breast.

That's a cigarrette balanced
so lightly in my fingers;
you can stop staring
it's not a joint.

Do you think it escapes
my notice when you stare?
Do you think I don't know
you judge me?

Tell me what you think
when you see me;
what horrors cross your mind-
am I a sin against nature?

I am the damned
destined to burn in hell
because I chose the wrong
shirt to wear.
"Well, here we are, Mr. Pilgrim, trapped in the amber of this moment." - Slaughter House Five, Kurt Vonnegut

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Postby TheMudge » Thu Dec 15, 2005 11:16 pm

Very nice, Wrath . . . um, feeling a little persecuted, are we?
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Postby Delaney » Fri Dec 16, 2005 12:10 am

I think I get it.

I like it. Has a rawness to it.
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Postby wrathofpengy » Fri Dec 16, 2005 11:25 am

um, feeling a little persecuted, are we


This was written for my dad more than anything. He's a hard-nosed right wing and anything that isn't Christian and Republican (and looks like it) is evil.
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Dec 16, 2005 12:32 pm

Ah. One of THOSE. Don't let him read my column this week . . .
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Postby goody2shoes » Mon Jan 02, 2006 11:06 pm

wrathofpengy wrote:
um, feeling a little persecuted, are we


This was written for my dad more than anything. He's a hard-nosed right wing and anything that isn't Christian and Republican (and looks like it) is evil.




well its is, if god says don't do it then it is evil there is no maybe. But about the Republican thing, so if its not Republican then is evil that is dump to believe. Well I am a Republican but I don’t agree with some things they believe or do. I do know what you mean my father is like that, just don’t turn away from god because of what your father is. But anyway about the poem, good writing style. Like it.

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