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new kid's poem

Postby choclatbubl » Tue Feb 17, 2004 11:22 am

take a peek at this, if yall would, thanks a bunch!


raindrops in silver form
float away, the moon is warm
stand upon a crater there
and make a footprint for your chair

see yall, cool beans!
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Feb 17, 2004 12:25 pm

It's cute. It's descriptive. I have no idea what you're talking about, but I'm used to that . . .
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Postby JillStar » Tue Feb 17, 2004 12:45 pm

Hey choclatbubl

I like the way it sounds on my tongue. But like Mudge, I'm unsure of the subject. If you are so inclined... perhaps you could share with us what your thoughts were when you wrote it.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Feb 17, 2004 12:51 pm

Also, Jillstar is nicer than I am.
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Postby choclatbubl » Tue Feb 17, 2004 1:42 pm

hey thanks for the comments.
really, i dont know what i was thinking, i just liked the way it sounded and the words came out. i guess its one of those nonsense poems. ever read 'em? they're pretty funny.
but i dunno. i had this drawing and i was sort of writing it. strange drawing:)
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