Haiku for me, Haiku for you

luminosity · Postby **luminosity** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 2:18 pm

My favorite scene--
mountains white, water so blue,
and trees evergreen.

purty_trash · Postby **purty_trash** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 3:01 pm

er... i haven't tried Haiku yet. it looks like a lot of fun. tell me if i deviate from the definition or anything else.

A raindrop jumps,
from skies above, as thunders clap,
Falling to lift my soul.

luminosity · Postby **luminosity** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 4:04 pm

Nice one, purty :-D

We go to poetry.com for the daily haiku picture and the "poetry in motion". The haiku is typically three lines...first line five syllables, second line seven syllables, and third line five again...(5-7-5).
Glad to see you're giving it a try...hope we see more from you!

The PIM is fun too...just click on "poetry in motion", and select twenty "tiles" or less to create a short poem. C'mon over and try it!

*Word of caution...
don't get sucked into poetry.com's hype...unless you WANT to put out money to see yourself in print with just anybody who will pay to be published :wink:

purty_trash · Postby **purty_trash** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 4:18 pm

thanx lum

is it required that i go over and see the daily picture? i am not comfortable with boundations.

I let my spirit wander,
Over the Mountains, under the sea,
And what's mine, came back.

golly, this is so much fun. Whee! :-D

er... what are syllables.

? sorry, i'm totally naive when it comes to poems. not that i'm claiming anything in terms of short stories....

pengwenn · Postby **pengwenn** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 4:21 pm

sunlight glints off of
still calm waters in front of
mountains quiet repose

(I'm a bit rusty)

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 8:14 pm

Hi, purty... syllables are:
I let my spir it wan der (7)
o ver the mount ains, un der the sea (9)
and what's mine came back (5)

I like this one very much, purty. And only on poetry.com are they that fussy that you have to have 5 - 7- 5
Many modern haiku are written in varying syllables, so don't worry about it. Just write what feels true to you.
A haiku ideally will have a surface meaning plus an underlying meaning and always touches on some aspect of nature or the seasons. There...a capsule haiku lesson. :-D

purty_trash · Postby **purty_trash** » Mon Sep 26, 2005 9:11 pm

Hmmm Mlou,
something to chew upon. i'll keep it in mind. Thanx for the capsule lesson.

purty_trash · Postby **purty_trash** » Tue Sep 27, 2005 1:23 am

Moon in the night sky,
Lonely, lovely, single eye,
Hums her song of life.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Wed Sep 28, 2005 11:30 am

Very nice, purty. Haiku's are fun, aren't they?
We do a daily one from the picture supplied on poetry.com. Today's:

pink waterlilies,
delicate confections rise
from dark beginnings.

purty_trash · Postby **purty_trash** » Wed Sep 28, 2005 3:11 pm

They sure are Mlou. some are so beautiful they really moved me. I just went through some of those posted in the previous pages.

I think I'll give poetry.com a try, though i much rather prefer a picture from my mind. :-D

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Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Wed Sep 28, 2005 5:08 pm

Just use them but don't get involved with them. It's pretty scammy. They want to print your poems...and will print ANYTHING...then you're supposed to buy the book for #39.95 of whatever.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Thu Sep 29, 2005 11:40 am

Drive back the darkness,
flaming sky, with scarlet and
gold legions of cloud.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Mon Oct 03, 2005 11:10 am

Leaping toward heaven
the spume and splash of ocean
against the black rocks

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Tue Oct 11, 2005 2:48 pm

Knowing his beauty
he preens, spreading great wide wings
the color of flame.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Fri Nov 04, 2005 3:53 pm

Haven't been doing these, as most of the pictures are "reruns".

Clouds surround the moon
like acolytes at a throne...
she remains aloof.

Postby **JillStar** » Fri Nov 04, 2005 8:25 pm

I still don't look at the pictures... but based on your poem I would say it was a picture of a moon and clouds.

Clouds hide the beauty
keeping the brightness at bay
til after the rain.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Sat Nov 05, 2005 9:29 am

How did you guess? :wink:

Something very dramatic about moon and drifting clouds, isn't there?

WryterForLyfe · Postby **WryterForLyfe** » Wed Nov 09, 2005 11:40 am

rip off all your clothes
bathe yourself in moonlight
return to nature

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Wed Nov 09, 2005 5:52 pm

You first, Wryter! :-D

Winter companion,
snowbird in the evergreen
you lift up my heart.

snowbird · Postby **snowbird** » Thu Nov 10, 2005 10:32 am

Whispering friendship,
comfortable and cozy,
safe in your presence.

snowbird · Postby **snowbird** » Fri Nov 11, 2005 5:12 pm

Out of ocean's depth
reflections of light linger,
reassuring me.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Tue Nov 22, 2005 1:01 pm

Dawn of creation
must have looked like this cloud of
possibility.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Wed Nov 23, 2005 1:10 pm

Nature has scissored
a shimmering silhouette
in silver and black.

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Fri Nov 25, 2005 11:38 am

The waters of life
flow swiftly past unheeding
to find journey's end

Mlou · Postby **Mlou** » Mon Nov 28, 2005 2:52 pm

Starfish glimmering
as if fallen from heaven...
treasure among stones.

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