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Nice one, purty
We go to poetry.com for the daily haiku picture and the "poetry in motion". The haiku is typically three lines...first line five syllables, second line seven syllables, and third line five again...(5-7-5).
Glad to see you're giving it a try...hope we see more from you!
The PIM is fun too...just click on "poetry in motion", and select twenty "tiles" or less to create a short poem. C'mon over and try it!
*Word of caution...
don't get sucked into poetry.com's hype...unless you WANT to put out money to see yourself in print with just anybody who will pay to be published

Glad to see you're giving it a try...hope we see more from you!
The PIM is fun too...just click on "poetry in motion", and select twenty "tiles" or less to create a short poem. C'mon over and try it!

*Word of caution...
don't get sucked into poetry.com's hype...unless you WANT to put out money to see yourself in print with just anybody who will pay to be published

To avoid criticism, do nothing, say nothing, be nothing.--Elbert Hubbard
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thanx lum
is it required that i go over and see the daily picture? i am not comfortable with boundations.
I let my spirit wander,
Over the Mountains, under the sea,
And what's mine, came back.
golly, this is so much fun. Whee!
er... what are syllables.
? sorry, i'm totally naive when it comes to poems. not that i'm claiming anything in terms of short stories....
is it required that i go over and see the daily picture? i am not comfortable with boundations.
I let my spirit wander,
Over the Mountains, under the sea,
And what's mine, came back.
golly, this is so much fun. Whee!

er... what are syllables.

Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing.
Hi, purty... syllables are:
I let my spir it wan der (7)
o ver the mount ains, un der the sea (9)
and what's mine came back (5)
I like this one very much, purty. And only on poetry.com are they that fussy that you have to have 5 - 7- 5
Many modern haiku are written in varying syllables, so don't worry about it. Just write what feels true to you.
A haiku ideally will have a surface meaning plus an underlying meaning and always touches on some aspect of nature or the seasons. There...a capsule haiku lesson.
I let my spir it wan der (7)
o ver the mount ains, un der the sea (9)
and what's mine came back (5)
I like this one very much, purty. And only on poetry.com are they that fussy that you have to have 5 - 7- 5
Many modern haiku are written in varying syllables, so don't worry about it. Just write what feels true to you.
A haiku ideally will have a surface meaning plus an underlying meaning and always touches on some aspect of nature or the seasons. There...a capsule haiku lesson.

nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
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Very nice, purty. Haiku's are fun, aren't they?
We do a daily one from the picture supplied on poetry.com. Today's:
pink waterlilies,
delicate confections rise
from dark beginnings.
We do a daily one from the picture supplied on poetry.com. Today's:
pink waterlilies,
delicate confections rise
from dark beginnings.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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Just use them but don't get involved with them. It's pretty scammy. They want to print your poems...and will print ANYTHING...then you're supposed to buy the book for #39.95 of whatever.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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Drive back the darkness,
flaming sky, with scarlet and
gold legions of cloud.
flaming sky, with scarlet and
gold legions of cloud.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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Leaping toward heaven
the spume and splash of ocean
against the black rocks
the spume and splash of ocean
against the black rocks
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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Knowing his beauty
he preens, spreading great wide wings
the color of flame.
he preens, spreading great wide wings
the color of flame.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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Haven't been doing these, as most of the pictures are "reruns".
Clouds surround the moon
like acolytes at a throne...
she remains aloof.
Clouds surround the moon
like acolytes at a throne...
she remains aloof.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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I still don't look at the pictures... but based on your poem I would say it was a picture of a moon and clouds.
Clouds hide the beauty
keeping the brightness at bay
til after the rain.

Clouds hide the beauty
keeping the brightness at bay
til after the rain.
Fast Fiction Friday Blog 2011-2018: Additional FFF Prompts
How did you guess?
Something very dramatic about moon and drifting clouds, isn't there?

Something very dramatic about moon and drifting clouds, isn't there?
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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You first, Wryter!
Winter companion,
snowbird in the evergreen
you lift up my heart.

Winter companion,
snowbird in the evergreen
you lift up my heart.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
Dawn of creation
must have looked like this cloud of
possibility.
must have looked like this cloud of
possibility.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
Nature has scissored
a shimmering silhouette
in silver and black.
a shimmering silhouette
in silver and black.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
The waters of life
flow swiftly past unheeding
to find journey's end
flow swiftly past unheeding
to find journey's end
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
Starfish glimmering
as if fallen from heaven...
treasure among stones.
as if fallen from heaven...
treasure among stones.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
GINGERBREAD MAN by Mary Lou Healy at Amazon.com http://www.publishamerica.com/shopping/ ... ogid=16658 at Publish America
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