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Postby Mlou » Thu Dec 07, 2006 9:22 pm

You left out where and who. (Or was he on first base?)
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Postby LilacWine » Fri Dec 08, 2006 4:31 pm

I got two very different poems out of today's list.

Take One

Cold corners surrounded
their accidental territory --
Shaky continents mapped
with screams and whispers,
guarded with shattered mirrors.

Take Two



I'm
shattered
in the
broken
mirror, bits
of me
here,
pieces
there,
small
continents
like a
shaky
map of
myself.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )

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Postby Mlou » Fri Dec 08, 2006 4:32 pm

I kind of thought we'd both hit on shattered, broken pieces, mirrors...Some words just don't let you off the hook.
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Postby pengwenn » Fri Dec 08, 2006 5:15 pm

Well, at least someone's written something using "chortle"....

[quote=Stephen King in "Bag of Bones"]
"What about a cassette player? You got one of those? If you do, I'll play you something that will make you chortle."

"I don't think I've ever heard that word actually used in conversation, John."

The grin shown out again, and I noticed what a lot of freckles he had. Sheriff Andy's boy Oppie grows up to serve at the bar. "I'm a lawyer. I use words in conversation that haven't even been invented yet. You have a tape-player?"[/quote]
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Postby Mlou » Fri Dec 08, 2006 5:27 pm

Oh, priceless, peng!! Proof that the detested word is real, if unloved. :-D
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Postby LilacWine » Sat Dec 09, 2006 10:00 am

The only reason I never use the word is out of respect for Charles Dodgson (aka Lewis Carroll) who invented the word, meaning something between a snort and a chuckle. After all, how can one compete with the originator?

btw, "Jabberwocky" is one of the few poems I can recite from memory.
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Postby LilacWine » Sat Dec 09, 2006 10:41 am

Nameless

A line of grace
in cold-chisell'd form,
time giving lustre
to dead hues--
she is Love's
timeless mystery.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Dec 09, 2006 11:22 am

Yep, as usual, we fall for the same words. I Like what you did with them. :-D
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Postby LilacWine » Sun Dec 10, 2006 2:17 pm

One Half-Crescent Night

Bonfire smoke fronts a shanty,
hip-flasks pass by silent men,
unarmed, but welcoming a fight.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Sun Dec 10, 2006 4:06 pm

Now that one sounds like JT. :twisted: Too bad he refuses to visit this thread. He might even enjoy it.
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Postby LilacWine » Mon Dec 11, 2006 3:30 pm

Souvenirs:

A silky robe, our song,
a love message,
sour laughter and
your soft lies.
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Postby Mlou » Mon Dec 11, 2006 4:25 pm

Well, the French list didn't get the better of us, did it? :twisted: Tough challenge!
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Postby LilacWine » Sat Dec 16, 2006 10:50 am

The painted tulip duvet swells,
a scent of freshly-washed hair
invades the bed, stretching
through stale yellow air.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Sat Dec 16, 2006 11:02 am

Many same words, completely different take. That's what I like about that list! :-D
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Postby JT » Sat Dec 16, 2006 4:14 pm

Mlou wrote:Now that one sounds like JT. :twisted: Too bad he refuses to visit this thread. He might even enjoy it.


Golly, Mary Lou, you sure seem to have it in for me just because I'm ripping off free therapy.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Dec 16, 2006 4:23 pm

Absolutely not. If you note the date, it was written about the time that you said you wouldn't visit these threads because....well, because. :twisted: But now that we've twisted your arm and you're here, I look forward to some takes from you on what some days we call the dratted list.
Besides, I don't have it in for anyone. It's too much work to keep up a head of steam about anything. And any time I have a choice, I go for lazy.
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Postby JT » Sat Dec 16, 2006 4:39 pm

"Nag, nag, nag." Clint Eastwood
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Postby Mlou » Sat Dec 16, 2006 5:34 pm

Oh, that must be the nag I bet on! Can't win.
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Postby LilacWine » Sun Dec 17, 2006 10:00 am

Roses
are whispering
along the path
puzzled by humanity
pierced by reality --
the bitter heart
of mortality
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Sun Dec 17, 2006 10:42 am

Uh-huh...we DO pull out the same words! :-D
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Postby LilacWine » Mon Dec 18, 2006 6:29 pm

Cooler Weather

Our stifling
humid melancholy
has languished for
unbreathing days.
His silent smirk
now leaves me
anticipating
tomorrow's
thunderstorms.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Mon Dec 18, 2006 6:33 pm

Hey, that sounds like a happy couple. :shock: I like what you pulled out of that lot! In spite of the plentiful words, the pile didn't appeal very much.
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Postby LilacWine » Thu Dec 21, 2006 10:47 am

Consequence

Her
shuttered eyes have seen
passions floating on foam;
storm-waves dancing
like shadows in sun.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Dec 21, 2006 11:14 am

Oooh...this is a GOOD one! :-D
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Postby LilacWine » Sat Dec 23, 2006 2:43 pm

Rising

Man is mortal,
lost and bereft;
where cold
permeates
the soul,
reasoning is
a sweet ray
of light.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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