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Postby LilacWine » Mon Jul 10, 2006 7:44 am

Commas

pausing dimples,
hooks holding breath,
dipping elbows to
crook the next break,
posed resistance
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )

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Postby Mlou » Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:45 pm

Nice original take on the words! We only used two words in common today.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...


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Postby LilacWine » Tue Jul 11, 2006 3:17 pm

On a northern run,
we crossed the border,
our last sight, the rain,
beyond it was nothing.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Wed Jul 12, 2006 8:45 am

Keep going. About 50 reruns left before you give it up. :D
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Postby LilacWine » Wed Jul 12, 2006 10:23 am

Indian Summer

Crimson sunrise
Spun-gold sky
Shimmering grain
Harvest of paint-brushed leaves
A window to winter
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Wed Jul 12, 2006 1:09 pm

Evocative picture. Nice words to work with today, huh?
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Postby LilacWine » Wed Jul 12, 2006 3:32 pm

Better than usual, but I would still like more fat, juicy verbs in the mix.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Wed Jul 12, 2006 4:22 pm

Yeah, and if they'd substitute them for delicious, desire & chortle!
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Postby pengwenn » Fri Jul 21, 2006 1:44 pm

the clouds
make an end
to the rapture
of immortal warmth
Is this my reality or yours?
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Postby Mlou » Fri Jul 21, 2006 6:55 pm

:) Glad you stopped in!
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Postby LilacWine » Sat Jul 22, 2006 6:13 pm

Love's golden pen lingers
on the gilded page of time,
writing sonnets
with new found words.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Sun Jul 23, 2006 1:15 pm

You write THE sonnets. :-D
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Postby LilacWine » Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:54 pm

Married in Vain

The uxorious husband
and his self-absorbed wife
found on the bottom
of Shadow Lake.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Mon Jul 24, 2006 12:19 pm

Yikes! I love a mystery! (Anyone remember that old radio program? Of course not. You babies don't even remember radio, period. :-D )
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Postby pengwenn » Mon Jul 24, 2006 1:40 pm

I will steal
the silence
in my focused
compulsion
to escape in books
Is this my reality or yours?
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Postby Mlou » Mon Jul 24, 2006 6:11 pm

Nicely done!
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Postby LilacWine » Mon Jul 24, 2006 9:40 pm

Claustrophobic

Pin-striped suits and paisley ties
squeezed into neat rows,
like supermarket racks and
stacked with neon screams.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby LilacWine » Tue Jul 25, 2006 7:25 am

My foolish ship
was burdened by
accepted existence;
its futile rising
exposed as a dream,
misleading the explorer.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby LilacWine » Wed Jul 26, 2006 12:07 pm

Sadistic Winter

Nature’s tyrant whose wail
and piercing sting
makes our cry become frail:
Death is thus King.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby pengwenn » Wed Jul 26, 2006 5:42 pm

woe is the heaven
that cries the
death of spring
Is this my reality or yours?
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Postby LilacWine » Thu Jul 27, 2006 8:34 am

The Northern sun,
on a never-ending run,
crossed heaven’s curves,
awakening insane nerves.
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby purty_trash » Thu Jul 27, 2006 11:19 am

great work poets, here's my regular pat on the back. Keep it up! :-D
Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing.
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Postby LilacWine » Thu Jul 27, 2006 1:06 pm

Thanks for the pat on the back. Could you throw money instead? :D
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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Postby Mlou » Thu Jul 27, 2006 6:08 pm

And you know what they can do with THAT list!! WHAT is their fixation with it????
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Postby LilacWine » Fri Jul 28, 2006 11:58 am

Only certain
heart-faced flowers
witnessed the vibrations
made by breeze whispers
through the dormant paths
"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )



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