P.I.M. - POETRY IN MOTION

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P.I.M. - POETRY IN MOTION

Postby Sweetwater » Sun Jun 13, 2004 12:52 pm

As Mlou as been such a wonderful coach and encourager to using the daily Poetry in Motion words to create our little blurbs of emotion, I thought it might be advisable to create a separate topic for all of us who will be (or are) participating...instead of clogging up her separate topic. This is a lot of fun and even though it's only my third day, I have enjoyed it immensely, so thanks Mlou for the encouragement. Now, we just need some more participants.

Sunday, June 13, 2004

The missing soul watches among the monuments
The rains drench
Till the final desire subsides
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Postby Lyric » Sun Jun 13, 2004 3:11 pm

Thanks for opening this thread. I was wondering what a PIM was. Thanks for clearing that up for me. I went to the site and tried my first PIM. It really is great fun. I think that it will become a daily activity for me.

Don't laugh, you guys. This is only my first try. Here goes:

Sundown
runaway waterfall
tingles as from my name
sing trinkets to the soul
touch the marrow
drench my tongue :oops:
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Postby Mlou » Sun Jun 13, 2004 5:05 pm

Oh, I'm so delighted that you guys are going to do the PIM regularly!! It's such a little challenge to start the day off with. And DO try the haiku on the same site. We have a haiku thread here already and it will probably be so happy to have someone else besides me, and a couple of OCCASIONAL others, posting. :o)
PS..But don't forget to visit my PIM and post a hello.
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Postby Aiden » Sun Jun 13, 2004 11:38 pm

Lucky bunch.

With my computer messed up, I can't PIM at all. :cry: I liked it so much, I'm considering going to the library once a day just to pick up the PIM.

Or one of you could copy all the words down and send them to me. Pretty please. :cry: :cry: :cry:
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Postby Sweetwater » Mon Jun 14, 2004 10:46 am

Poetry in Motion
Monday, June 14, 2004

Old-fashioned Amsterdam
With soft, silvery moonlight,
American raises glass
"Until later"


This reminds me of departures from friends in Amsterdam and in other places I have been where I knew, but couldn't say, that I probably wouldn't see my friends again; or, if so, it would be a long time. I was determined to use "Amsterdam" in the piece today.

Aiden, I've already closed out today's contest, so I don't think there's any way to get back to it. I am also unable to get the words on my computer and have to use my husband's computer in his den. My computer-savvy son tells me I am just going to have to live with the limitations of my computer, which I am not totally willing to accept. As to copying the words down, is there a way to copy the words page and send it to you? If so, I would be happy to do that. Looking forward to seeing your contributions here.
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Postby Mlou » Mon Jun 14, 2004 11:46 am

That's really nice, Sweetwater! I wasn't inspired today by the words but I made a couple of lacklustre tries.

Aiden...Sometimes I print them out to look at later. I didn't today. I could try to email yesterday's if you want.
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Postby Lyric » Mon Jun 14, 2004 1:58 pm

Today's PIM effort:

Eyes fashioned
with desire
found the
delicious American dream;
pie and no-hitters
pitched in moonlight.
Love until the end.
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Postby EZ » Mon Jun 14, 2004 2:17 pm

coolness of wind
breaking the paled
skin that which
could not breathe

softly caressing
wounds dried
making the sore
anew with life
Ignorance is bliss
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Postby Mlou » Mon Jun 14, 2004 5:43 pm

Hi, EZ...very visual poem.
If you're following the PIM rules though, you have more than the allowed 20 words or pieces of words that are listed daily on the poetry.com site. If you haven't tried it, do...it's a lot of fun.
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Postby Aiden » Mon Jun 14, 2004 11:07 pm

Really, I was just joking.

We're getting our computer fixed soon. We're on vacation next week, so I'll be gone. Before we leave, we will drop off our computer at the repair shop, where they will dump everything and reload. So I can PIM in two weeks!!
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Postby EZ » Mon Jun 14, 2004 11:19 pm

Mlou wrote:Hi, EZ...very visual poem.
If you're following the PIM rules though, you have more than the allowed 20 words or pieces of words that are listed daily on the poetry.com site. If you haven't tried it, do...it's a lot of fun.



oh...ok mlou....no i wasn't following the rules....
i think the ''poetry in motion'' phrase bounced up to me as just''poetry''.....
so now i know..... :)
thanks for your feedback!
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Postby Sweetwater » Tue Jun 15, 2004 9:45 am

I don't know if others are having problems with Poetry in Motion this morning, but I can't get the words to come up on any of the computers in the house. Ugh! Maybe it will work later.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Jun 15, 2004 12:47 pm

Sent them to you. Hope they arrive.
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Postby Sweetwater » Tue Jun 15, 2004 1:43 pm

Yes, Mlou, the words arrived, but I retrieved them after coming back from the library to do my daily PIM, since I can't get any of these computers here to cooperate (I think we're having problems with our internet connection)...Thank you for being so thoughtful. Out of three computers, one would think at least one of the computers could retrieve the words. The words frustrated me today (but then I must admit I am having a frustrating day); with at least three of each of the following words in our choices: because, remembering, stopped. Anyway, I tried:

Poetry in Motion
Tuesday, June 15, 2004

Mid-day and alone
Someone disturbs mind,
Remembering because
.


And, in JEST, I had to just use some of those words over again:

Because, because, because
Remembering stopped.


Have a wonder-filled day!
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Postby Mlou » Tue Jun 15, 2004 2:30 pm

Yes, sometimes the words..even when there are a lot of them..just aren't interesting. I don't like repeats, as you mentioned, and I absolutely refuse to use chortle and certain others that have been on EVERY DAY for 6 months! And some of them NOBODY would use in a poem.
Anyway, I liked because, because, because :o
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Postby Sweetwater » Wed Jun 16, 2004 2:54 pm

Wednesday, June 16, 2004
Poetry in Motion

Familiar prayer,
My life's chartered path
Will be found
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Postby Mlou » Wed Jun 16, 2004 5:44 pm

Nice comforting thought! :o
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Postby Lyric » Wed Jun 16, 2004 5:49 pm

Today's effort:

Cross carefully.
Travel that path.
Life's travels are
never navigated smoothly
and are thankfully
strangely comfortable.

Mlou, have you or has anyone on this site ever won the PIM? I'm not really doing it to win. It is a great mental exercise, and loads of fun. Thanks for letting everyone know about the poetry.com site!
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Postby Mlou » Wed Jun 16, 2004 6:01 pm

Hi, Lyric...No, I don't personally know anyone who has ever won but they do list their daily winners and have a list of "blurbs" from winners "thrilled to win" etc. But have you ever actually read any of the winners???Eeeewww! They figure winners on TIMEOF DAY not on talent. Obviously!
Like you, I do it because it's a great starter-upper.
And I love to see what different ones we WTers all come up with.
Do click on the daily haiku pic and try that also. Then post it on our haiku thread. I'll look for it! :o)
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Postby Sweetwater » Thu Jun 17, 2004 1:52 pm

Poetry in Motion
Thursday, June 17, 2004

Awakening predator's piercing eyes,
Sighting nature's desire;
Turning, aiming, grasping downward
Approaches toward nestled catch.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Jun 17, 2004 1:59 pm

Having fun, Sweetwater? See how different everyone thinks. Yours is great, uses the words well; mine's completely different. And others, if they post, will be unlike either of ours.
Don't forget to try the haiku! :o
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Postby EZ » Thu Jun 17, 2004 1:59 pm

......very nice...like the 'climax' tone.....
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Postby EZ » Thu Jun 17, 2004 2:09 pm

'sweet tempers distracting
alacrity of thought needed
to mend bruised rosebushes'

(mlou i did the PIM at poetry.com...fun fun fun)
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Postby Lyric » Thu Jun 17, 2004 2:43 pm

Sighting a beacon of power,
awakening with a searching calm,
I master aiming over
the grasp of
the predator's eyes.
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Postby Sweetwater » Thu Jun 17, 2004 3:56 pm

Mlou, this is great fun. And thanks for your comments (you too, EZ). Some people may still be having problems accessing the words on the poetry.com site, as they are experiencing some difficulties which will be fixed by Monday, according to a customer service representative at the site. I am still going to the library to do mine (can't get the words to come up on the computers here...still). By the way, did you notice that romantic was spelled "romatic" in the selection today? I wanted to use it, just in jest and for your benefit, but it didn't quite fit with my train of thought today.

For all of you who have not tried this, it is a great deal of fun. It typically takes no longer than 5 or 6 minutes to arrange the words.

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