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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 11, 2006 5:04 pm

Thanks, purty! Haven't seen many posts by you of late. Nice to know you're still checking in. As for Joy, be bold. Let her know you're around...what have you got to lose??
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Postby purty_trash » Sun Mar 12, 2006 10:43 am

Hey, I've been posting stories in my own group. They've been collecting fair amount of applause. I'll mail them to you and then if you've got time on your hands you can go through them.

I'll try to be bold. Actually a lot's on stake. I'm in India, which is still a somewhat reserved (coy actually) community. If I fail my classmates are going to make folktales out of this small adventure. ( you expect that of a 20 years old? No, maybe but then again that's how I am. :cry: )
Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing.
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 12, 2006 5:49 pm

BEING
I found solace in little things...
turning leaves, wind-song in reeds,
and the quiet voices of love.
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Postby Mlou » Mon Mar 13, 2006 10:14 am

QUESTION
Who can stop the rain
or know tomorrow
before the morning's dawn?
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Mar 13, 2006 10:41 am

I like "Being". "Question", no so much.

"Being" was very evocative.
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Postby Mlou » Mon Mar 13, 2006 2:23 pm

Yeah, sometimes the words just aren't there. Or they push you in a certain direction with their word list and being a non-conformist, I don't go.
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Postby TheMudge » Mon Mar 13, 2006 2:36 pm

You hippie, you . . . :D
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Postby Mlou » Mon Mar 13, 2006 2:43 pm

lol! Only rear-endedly speaking!
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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 14, 2006 2:33 pm

EYE OF THE BEHOLDER
Even bouquets of
prickly thistle,
crests like trumpets,
are bursts of color
in spring.
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Mar 14, 2006 3:39 pm

OK, I feel weird critiquing your stuff, but I think this one would read better if you started with "Crested like trumpets" (are trumpets crested?) and then did the rest like it is.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 14, 2006 4:59 pm

Good thinking! But crest...ed would have gone over 20 pieces. (I don't count the titles in and don't put them on p.coN.)
And no, I don't think that trumpets are crested in the literal sense :-D but thistle tops (crests) flare out kind of like the end of a trumpet so.....
And I'm still waiting for YOUR PIM sally, Mudge. :twisted:
And I'm happy to have you critique. I ain't poifick by any means and all opinions and suggestions are welcome and appreciated.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 14, 2006 5:00 pm

Good thinking! But crest...ed would have gone over 20 pieces. (I don't count the titles in and don't put them on p.coN.)
And no, I don't think that trumpets are crested :-D but thistle tops (crests) flare out kind of like the end of a trumpet so.....
And I'm still waiting for YOUR PIM sally, Mudge. :twisted:
And I'm happy to have you critique. I ain't poifick by any means and all opinions and suggestions are welcome and appreciated.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 16, 2006 1:24 pm

FAITH
Whatever comes, I start again.
A voice inside
wills me to journey on and let
love be my guide.
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 17, 2006 11:41 am

AMBIENT LIGHT
Flickering candles defied the night,
awakened our love, before
we blew them out with soft laughter.

Have NO idea why I titled it thusly. :roll:
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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 18, 2006 3:56 pm

I liked the word list today, so I junked the 20-piece rule. :twisted:

CHILDHOOD BEACH

By the water's edge, we sat
awash in wave-song and
the scent of brine. We found
tiger bones and dragon feathers,
horses' ears and shell fragments
colored like iris, reflecting
down the sweet, bright
eons of dream-time.
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Postby Bess » Sun Mar 19, 2006 12:53 am

Love it...love the word selection you've chosen. I know I would have used most of the same words that you used.
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 19, 2006 10:48 am

So where's your poem? :?:
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Postby Bess » Sun Mar 19, 2006 1:57 pm

Ok, smarty pants...it was after midnight and the new word list was up. I would have liked to try the word list with dragons, etc. But, alas...it was not to be...
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 19, 2006 3:34 pm

Ah, hah! But it CAN be...I printed it out. heeheehee
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Postby Bess » Sun Mar 19, 2006 11:01 pm

Weeel, send it to me...
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Postby Mlou » Mon Mar 20, 2006 9:33 am

It's no fun that way though, because you can't move them around with the mouse.
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Postby Mlou » Tue Mar 21, 2006 4:31 pm

I hear the river's voice
rushing away to the sea,
a rich song of waters
carrying rainbows home.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 23, 2006 3:45 pm

I saw the silhouette
of an angel praying
or was it only a cloud
whispering at Heaven's door?
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...





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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 24, 2006 10:40 am

Love that came as rockets
died softly, turning
every word to stone,
desire to dust.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 25, 2006 10:57 am

My Dream Journey

Wheeling in shadows,
ascending through mystery
into silver starlight,
riding the wind I go,
buoyant and free.
nothing is ever simply Yes or No. There's always a But...





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