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Postby Mlou » Wed Mar 17, 2004 2:23 pm

Here's a little one I constructed from what I call the "fish pond"...a pile of miscellaneous words (on poetry.com) that changes daily. You're allowed only 20 "pieces", words or parts of words.


A chill rain tasting of Spring
whispered to morning
as broken blossoms
fell from branches in
silent pain.
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Postby Power of Cheese » Wed Mar 17, 2004 2:29 pm

Great poem Mlou, I just might have to check out poetry.com. But I disagree with you on the silent pain part. I think the blossoms like falling, because then they get to watch as someone has to rake it all up!
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Postby Mlou » Wed Mar 17, 2004 2:32 pm

We don't rake 'em. Let 'em go back to the soil. Our house is smack in the middle of our apple orchard and it's like a petal scattered bride's carpet in the spring.


I wish you would check it out, Cheese! I'd like to have someone to rhyme with. It's fun. Just don't believe them when they start trying to tell you what a great poet you are and to sell you a page for your poem in their latest collection for only $49.95!
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Postby JillStar » Wed Mar 17, 2004 2:34 pm

Very nice Mlou!
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Postby Power of Cheese » Wed Mar 17, 2004 2:35 pm

God I envy you, both on having an apple orchard and not having to rake them. I love my home and my yard, which has lots of trees, but I HATE raking. It just never ends, there is always something dropping all year round. Anyway, 'nuff bitching.
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Postby Mlou » Wed Mar 17, 2004 2:37 pm

Well, Cheese, live on the top of a hill like we do and the wind just blows it all away...and you with it if you don't hang onto something! :0)

Thanks Jill. Did you check the redhead poem yesterday?
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Postby kexxy » Wed Mar 17, 2004 6:35 pm

thats so purty and kinda sad, but still purty!

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Postby Mlou » Wed Mar 17, 2004 6:45 pm

Thanx, Kelly :0)
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 18, 2004 11:17 am

Time changes all
touching us with icy finger...
only heaven has no end.
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Postby Mlou » Thu Mar 18, 2004 1:00 pm

Shaman, polishing stones
rolling bones,
whispers mysteries
of ancient faith,
his opal eye seeing
what will be.
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 19, 2004 1:09 pm

(not much to choose from today...best I could do:)

Today on the deserted beach
I bow to shimmering whitecaps and
longing, cup sun in my empty hands
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Postby kexxy » Fri Mar 19, 2004 8:50 pm

I really enjoy the Shaman one!
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Postby Mlou » Fri Mar 19, 2004 9:23 pm

Thanks Kelly. I'm still waiting for someone to try that site. It's great practice trying to make a poem out of stray words...except about once a month the words are all in French. I actually did one of those but have no idea if my grammar was proper or not.
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Postby kexxy » Fri Mar 19, 2004 11:30 pm

Heck all I know is Some french words from a Beatles song, that Mulan Rogue movie thing (or that La Belle chick, or Christina Ag, Pink, Mya, ect,) that they havent yet had a successful government, and that they sold their souls to the former Iraqui reigime.
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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 20, 2004 10:29 am

I'll post it. Maybe some of our more skilled language users can tell me how badly I goofed! :D

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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 20, 2004 12:33 pm

(From today's really limited pool of words)

What gentle spirit passes,
turning pain into joy?
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 21, 2004 11:05 am

I wake to the wind's harp playing,
like forgotten music
and mystical white radiance burns
through garnet fire
into morning.
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Postby April » Sun Mar 21, 2004 11:21 am

Mlou,
I know less French than Kelly, so I searched for an online translator. The first I found didn't do French to English, so I did French to Russian to English. This is what it looked like. Anything close to what you were going for?

Look at a sad life
In the afternoon of love and dezir
In the evening illuminate
All this is finished in shadows
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 21, 2004 11:30 am

Hi, April! Really close, so I guess I didn't do as poorly as I feared.
What I thought I was writing was:

Behold this sad life...
the day of love and desire,
of bright evening...
all is ended in shadow.

Thanks for checking it out. :) :) My high school French is a good many years behind me!!
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Postby Power of Cheese » Sun Mar 21, 2004 11:57 am

Mlou wrote:We don't rake 'em. Let 'em go back to the soil. Our house is smack in the middle of our apple orchard and it's like a petal scattered bride's carpet in the spring.


I wish you would check it out, Cheese! I'd like to have someone to rhyme with. It's fun. Just don't believe them when they start trying to tell you what a great poet you are and to sell you a page for your poem in their latest collection for only $49.95!

OK I went to the site. I actually entered one of my haiku's in the haiku contest. But to be honest with you, I'm not much of a poet, I have neither the smarts nor the patience...
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 21, 2004 12:57 pm

Aw c'mon...did you SEE some of the things that are entered on that site???
Your cat could do better walking across the keys!

And, as I said earlier, the poems aren't even judged on their merit but upon the TIME OF DAY they are entered! Ever hear the like?

So please, post your haiku on the haiku site for us to admire.

(Did you check out what I call the fish pond? That' fun!)

PPS..Hope April catches my "translation". :D
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 21, 2004 7:11 pm

#-o Wrong thread! :oops:
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Postby April » Sun Mar 21, 2004 7:38 pm

how is this the wrong thread?
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Postby Mlou » Sun Mar 21, 2004 8:24 pm

Just me...not the thread. I clicked on another poetry thread and my aim must be really bad!
Try reading all this stuff with one eye closed, you'll see what I mean. :0)
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Postby Mlou » Mon Mar 22, 2004 5:57 pm

The master of tales
enters our dreams
to feed on fears
to drink our tears
awakening chaos
in souls.
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