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Postby mslover » Thu Dec 06, 2007 1:20 pm

he kissed me once,
there in that soft place,
where necks blends to shoulder,
then kissed me again~
finding my lips warm, soft,
his arms wrap around my waist,
hands caressing my back,
and under his fingertips
I yield,
willing accomplice
to his desires.

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Postby TheMudge » Thu Dec 06, 2007 4:09 pm

Ooh la la . . . tristesse, schistesse . . . MS is back!
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Postby Mlou » Thu Dec 06, 2007 6:19 pm

Oh yeah! :wink:
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Postby Bess » Mon Jan 07, 2008 12:36 pm

:oops: Get A Room!

very nice ms :D
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Postby mslover » Thu Feb 07, 2008 2:22 pm

Simple

"looks like we are on the same schedule"
he said,
and I smiled,
remembering that we shared a seat
yesterday, he with his IPhone,
me, chatting with a friend,
as the bus took us homeward.
his friendliness engaged me,
as we chatted briefly,
then retreated,
filling our ears with music,
but he made my morning,
with his easy smile.

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Postby Mlou » Thu Feb 07, 2008 6:21 pm

Hmmmmm. Should we stay tuned for further developments? :wink:
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Postby JillStar » Thu Feb 07, 2008 7:00 pm

I like it.
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Feb 08, 2008 10:24 am

I like it, but I agree with Mlou: nothing really happens. Kinda want more of a reaction than making your morning ... like, WHY it made your morning? Or something.
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Postby mslover » Wed Feb 13, 2008 1:24 pm

sometimes all it takes is a smile from a stranger... i'll work on it though. most of what i write in here are quick blurbs that i need to go back and rewrite at some point. to that end:

loving you
i have come to realize
love is not enough
love cannot erase the pain
you bury inside,
the wall you have hiding
who you are,
why you are,
the truth of you.
you fall and will not take my hand
wallowing instead in your depression
i miss your smile,
your laugh,
and it breaks my heart to see them gone.

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Postby *Elle* » Wed Feb 13, 2008 2:39 pm

Hey mslover,

How are you?? Hope you are well. Just popped by to say hi. I like your poem entitled "loving you" Good Job :clap: :clap:
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Postby mslover » Mon Mar 03, 2008 1:49 pm

empty

when our lips
fail to meet, our limbs
fail to touch,
and all that remains
is a faint echo
of used to be,
will you fight,
for the us that used to be,
instead of letting it fade
into the past
or allow it to become simply
a memory of once was
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Postby TheMudge » Fri Mar 14, 2008 8:35 pm

OK, if the "you" in this poem was really interested in fighting ... seems to me, the relationship would never get to the stage where "our lips/fail to meet, our limbs/fail to touch". You say it like it is a foregone conclusion that it WILL happen ... which again, kinda makes the question you're asking moot. To me.

Just an observation ...
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Postby Mlou » Sat Mar 15, 2008 9:21 am

MS, I'm thinking you are working on a book of love poems, hmmmm?
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Postby mslover » Sun May 04, 2008 11:57 pm

passion cooled,
yet warmth remains
sharing friendship
in our laughter,
softening time ~
day blends into shadows,
your body and mind melt
into each other,
safe and simple,
easy.

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Postby TheMudge » Mon May 05, 2008 10:14 am

Hey, I like this one.
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Postby mslover » Mon May 05, 2008 11:00 pm

TheMudge wrote:Hey, I like this one.
lol...you sound surprised...

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Postby TheMudge » Tue May 06, 2008 8:36 am

Oh. Sorry. :oops:

I usually like your stuff, but it is almost always based on passion and/or longing and/or lonliness. There is a LOT going on in this one ... not just an expression of what you are feeling, but more ... a universal feeling, well translated.
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Postby mslover » Tue May 06, 2008 11:39 pm

LOL - i was only kidding but i'm glad you like it. i am thinking of trying some translitic poetry. i took a poetry class on college and bought the instructor's poetry book where she did a book full of translitic poetry.

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Postby mslover » Wed Jun 04, 2008 10:38 pm

if i took the time it needed
to tell you that i care
how much i love your laughter
laying my heart bare ~
and
if i put the past behind me
believed my future bright
held hope deep within me
would it make everything feel right?

ummm... amateur night at the apollo??? LMAO.... i kept hoping that if i kept typing SOMETHING would spur inspiration but well, i got nuthin'!
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Postby Mlou » Thu Jun 05, 2008 8:28 am

Okay, so I'm an old-time poet who doesn't know translitic poetry from chopped liver. Anyone else like me can get a brief sample of it at:
http://www.purplefrog.com/~christy/red- ... pmanp.html
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Postby TheMudge » Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:45 pm

OK, I am just confused ...
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Postby Mlou » Thu Jun 05, 2008 2:50 pm

If you're talking about the translitic poetry, Mudge, so am I. I was commenting on this post of ms.
i am thinking of trying some translitic poetry
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Postby mslover » Sat Jun 07, 2008 12:04 am

in very simplistic terms, a translitic poem is taking the essence of a poem in a language you don't speak and "translating" it into your own. There are a few ways to do it, however, the one i am taken with is taking the sounds of the words (or how you think they would be pronounced) and turning it into a poem of your own. i keep meaning to do it but just haven't tried it yet...

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Postby JillStar » Sat Jun 07, 2008 7:53 am

Hmmm... that might be something interesting to try...
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Postby Mlou » Sat Jun 07, 2008 10:52 am

What did you think of the purplefrog poems of j. lipman who is supposed to be a translitic poet?
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