Anblick's Quest for Immortality

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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:35 pm

Okay... that's alot better than mine, dear... you were supposed to write something CRAPPY... try again... :)
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:37 pm

That is crappy! I only put 10 minutes into it!
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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:39 pm

Like I said... try again...
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:41 pm

I wax and wane
I rise and fall
I come and go
Through big and small
To live the status quo
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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:44 pm

That's a wittle better... I know you create something real bad though... refer to my poems if you need help...
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:45 pm

C'mon, I spent less than a minute on that one!
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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:48 pm

You wanna take this outside??? :wink:
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:49 pm

Well, I'm not going to keep pumping out crappy stuff just for you to feel superior to me!
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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:54 pm

Why not? :?
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:55 pm

Well, I want to write good stuff...

And you're going blonde!
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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 09, 2005 10:57 pm

And this pisses you off I see...
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 09, 2005 11:02 pm

Which one?

OK, both!
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Postby Mlou » Thu Feb 10, 2005 10:22 pm

You're right, Anby...the first one is better. The second one, I don't know. You sound like you're a moon...or an elevator. :D But seeing that you spent less than a minute on it, weeellll...
Of the first one, I like the last stanza the best, particularly the last 2 lines. You appear to be becoming a wee bit more cheerful and optimistic than in some of your older poems. As Martha Stewart would say, that's a gooood thing.
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Postby Anblick » Thu Feb 10, 2005 10:23 pm

Thanks M!
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Postby Mlou » Thu Feb 10, 2005 10:26 pm

Keep it going, blick! I'm off to bed.
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Postby Anblick » Thu Feb 10, 2005 10:39 pm

Nite! But for my mental state, I hope it doesn't keep going, as my poetry is 95% a way to cope with stuff I'd rather not cope with...

However, in my mind, the last stanza you praised wasn't as hopeful as you envisioned. In fact I view it as darker than some previous stuff... Subtle clues, true, but I think the others were more optomistic...
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Postby DimMak » Wed Feb 16, 2005 4:00 am

Anblick, you should writ on th Tim Machin


(Oh no, swipp r stol all my low r cas E's!)

Okay, so I'm tir d, but th r is a play on words th r . I'm thinking Anblick is on of the f w to g t it though...Not th Swipp r part, but som thing ls .

:yimnerd: :laughy:
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Postby JillStar » Wed Feb 16, 2005 10:13 am

FYI: Dim is a nut
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 16, 2005 10:13 am

DimMak wrote:Anblick, you should writ on th Tim Machin


(Oh no, swipp r stol all my low r cas E's!)

Okay, so I'm tir d, but th r is a play on words th r . I'm thinking Anblick is on of the f w to g t it though...Not th Swipp r part, but som thing ls .

:yimnerd: :laughy:


Yeah, I got it, and reading this is like reading that guy that claimed the cockroaches wrote his stuff. Who was that? e e cummings?
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Postby Delaney » Wed Feb 16, 2005 11:27 am

Durrr?
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Postby Anblick » Wed Feb 16, 2005 1:23 pm

Delaney wrote:Durrr?


I just remember from English class that one poet used to write everything in lowercase letters (e e cumming, I think), and claimed facetiously that he never really wrote any of it, it was written by bugs jumping from key to key on his typewriter. Since they couldn't be on two keys at once (shift and the letter), they could only type in lowercase.
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Postby charlesp » Wed Feb 16, 2005 2:40 pm

DimMak wrote:Anblick, you should writ on th Tim Machin


(Oh no, swipp r stol all my low r cas E's!)

Okay, so I'm tir d, but th r is a play on words th r . I'm thinking Anblick is on of the f w to g t it though...Not th Swipp r part, but som thing ls .

:yimnerd: :laughy:


somebody been watching Dora? you have to say Swipper no swiping!

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One day I realized that sadness is just another word for not enough coffee." - Wally (Dilbert)
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Postby DimMak » Wed Feb 16, 2005 6:25 pm

I'm glas someone else has kids and can understand my pain...
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Postby charlesp » Wed Feb 16, 2005 6:34 pm

DimMak wrote:I'm glas someone else has kids and can understand my pain...


Oh I feel the pain... I feel it all too well... I've been fighting the songs in my head for WEEKS now that the baby has discovered The Wiggles... and those videos they play on nick or disney between shows... Laurie Berkner I think it is... "Vinnie Vedo and Freddie Vasco, eat spaghetti, with tabasco" ARghhhh they're in my head and they won't get OUT!!!.

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Postby DimMak » Wed Feb 16, 2005 6:42 pm

uurrghh, We have two Laurie Berkner CDs...the kids love her songs.

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