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Postby TheMudge » Tue Aug 15, 2006 4:37 pm

I pondered that in silence for awhile, weighing my options … one of which was telling her the truth. Thing with the truth was, most people didn’t really want to hear it, and people who had spent the better part of 30 years running from it wanted to hear it even less. Annie had been on the road, playing and making records, for about as long as I had known her. She still had this idea that she was going to be a star. Annie had been many things, and would be many more … but at age 43, my guess was that she was a step or two past her best chance at being a rock-n-roll star.

Which was not to imply, in any way, that the woman seated across from me was without talent. Slouched in the rattan loveseat with the overstuffed floral seat cushions that were yellowed and faded from the relentless Florida sun, Annie had her knees against the coffee table and her head back and her eyes closed and looked mostly asleep, or dead. But I knew that even then she was writing. Something she had seen from a stage or a bus window, something she had witnessed from the back booth of a Waffle House, some little scene had transmogrified into a bit of a lyric, and even at her most relaxed, Annie was toying with it, twisting it, pinching it … and it would emerge as some piece of poetry that encapsulated the human condition in such a simple, obvious, beautiful way that I’d want to slap my forehead and say out loud “Why didn’t I think of that?” This was Annie’s gift.
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Postby xcheck24 » Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:10 pm

i like this story, mudge. where are you going with it?
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:27 pm

Heck if I know
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Postby xcheck24 » Tue Aug 15, 2006 5:31 pm

just free writing?
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Postby TheMudge » Tue Aug 15, 2006 8:12 pm

It feels like it's coming from somewhere.
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Postby funkywriter3 » Tue Aug 15, 2006 8:17 pm

like heartburn? :wink:
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Postby xcheck24 » Tue Aug 15, 2006 8:47 pm

TheMudge wrote:It feels like it's coming from somewhere.


That's gas, mudge. Open the window.
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Aug 16, 2006 8:07 am

That's what I love about this site . . . all the encouragement . . . :roll:
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Postby xcheck24 » Wed Aug 16, 2006 8:14 am

oh stop. i told you like what you've got so far. i wanna know who the "him" is in the story. the guy who is the star.
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Aug 16, 2006 8:55 am

What if he's nobody?

You're the second person who mentioned it. I didn't think he was anybody. Maybe I was wrong.
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Postby xcheck24 » Wed Aug 16, 2006 8:58 am

well, you allude to this relationship she has with him. It's not so much that I want to know who he is specifically. I want to know about her relationship with him. He's the star, something she has always wanted. He took her song and made it famous. Did they start off as nobody's together and now he's a somebody? and does that make her angry? does it make her jealous of him? It's not so much knowing specifically who he is but rather about their relationship and how he relates to her. Make sense?
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Aug 16, 2006 9:04 am

Yeah, OK, that makes sense. Some of that will be explained, I think, a little later. I think you're inferring some things that won't turn out to be relevant . . . but it's good to know that that's where your mind is going.

I think you're trying to figure out what's going on, as a reader. And as a writer, I kinda am too. BUT--I'm looking at a bigger picture than you're privvy to (not complete, but I know there's more). Not your fault--even if the story were finished, if you had only gotten this far, you'd probably be thinking the same thing. So that's good to know.
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Postby xcheck24 » Wed Aug 16, 2006 9:12 am

well, i look forward to where you're taking it.
is this a short story? or something bigger?
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Aug 16, 2006 9:42 am

Dunno. I know there's more, but I don't know where it's going, either.
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Postby xcheck24 » Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:18 am

wait, you know where it's going but you dont know where it's going? am i getting that right from your last few posts? :lol:
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Postby pengwenn » Wed Aug 16, 2006 11:25 am

TheMudge wrote:and it would emerge as some piece of poetry that encapsulated the human condition in such a simple, obvious, beautiful way that I’d want to slap my forehead and say out loud “Why didn’t I think of that?” This was Annie’s gift.



I think the last line needs to be "This was Mudge's gift." :-D I really like it. It has a slow, casual feel to it. Comfortable and intriguing.
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Postby TheMudge » Wed Aug 16, 2006 1:19 pm

Thanks, Pengy.

xcheck24 wrote:wait, you know where it's going but you dont know where it's going? am i getting that right from your last few posts? :lol:


OK, smartie pants . . . I don't know where it's going . . . I just know MORE of where it's going than YOU do.

How's that? :wink:
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Postby charlesp » Wed Aug 16, 2006 1:22 pm

I'm just going to chime in very quietly in Mudge's ear here.

WORK ON GETTING THE BOOK READY TO GO OUT THE DOOR AND THEN GET IT OUT!

Back to your regularly (and deservedly) scheduled praise of Mudge's writing (with a bit of xcheck harrassing thrown in for good measure).

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Postby TheMudge » Wed Aug 16, 2006 2:29 pm

Don't wanna! And you can't make me! You're not the boss of me!

Oh, ok.

Check your damn email, will you?
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Postby xcheck24 » Wed Aug 16, 2006 3:41 pm

wait, charles is your boss? What's Mrs. Mudge then?

and charles, i am not harrassing. i was encouraging in my own twisted little way :lol:

so, mudge, is it that you know a piece of the story and you think it's bigger than that piece? is that what I'm gathering?
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Postby JillStar » Wed Aug 16, 2006 8:30 pm

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Postby Bluebird » Thu Aug 17, 2006 9:18 am

Mudge, I like what you have so far. It holds the interest, unlike a lot of other stuff I seem to come across.
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Postby LilacWine » Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:15 am

TheMudge wrote:It feels like it's coming from somewhere.


It's difficult to let go of those things that come to one from who knows where, isn't it? Rather like being haunted. You've created a riveting character in Annie, I hope she leads you through the rest of the story.
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Postby TheMudge » Thu Aug 17, 2006 12:21 pm

thanks, all. Me too.
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Postby TheMudge » Sun Aug 27, 2006 9:45 am

Lots of people recognized her gift. She’d made a pretty decent living out of it for a good many years. But Annie also had a knack for finding a gray lining for every silver cloud.

She had a cult following that bought every album she put out and attended every show within a 500 mile radius … but Annie said that only meant she had to keep cranking out material to survive. She was a sensation in eastern Europe, and consistently sold out arena shows in Japan … but Annie hated the constant touring, and preferred performing where she could actually count the faces in her audience. She had critical acclaim, and dozens of very popular musicians had recorded her songs … but Annie believed that having others feel the need to interpret your work just meant you hadn’t interpreted it right in the first place.

She and I had some agreement on that last point.

It certainly wasn’t that she couldn’t sing. Her guitar-playing was smooth, and more than adequate. The problem was more fuzzy than that. It was more like she felt her songs too much. When she sang, you not only felt the pain of what she was singing about, you also felt the pain she felt in trying—and never believing she was succeeding—to convey the full emotion to her audience. Her shows were more intense and cathartic and gut-wrenching than anything that had ever happened in a Roman colliseum, and mostly, American audiences couldn’t handle it.

Admittedly, Annie was a somewhat foreign and acquired taste. That explained her popularity elsewhere, but in Annie’s mind, unless she could sell out the gymnasium of her old high school and have everyone sit in rapt silence for three hours, well, she wasn’t getting her message out. And was, therefore, a failure.

I could explain to her that her definition for success was skewed. Lord knows I had before. But she didn’t listen to me as a rule, and she didn’t seem to be of a mind to start listening now.

So I said, “I didn’t know you could buy furs in the airport.”
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