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by sarjane
Mon Oct 13, 2008 8:36 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: FISH POND...(Mlou'sDailyPIM)
Replies: 2499
Views: 948215

awww :( so no more PIMs for you, then?
by sarjane
Fri Oct 10, 2008 4:09 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: FISH POND...(Mlou'sDailyPIM)
Replies: 2499
Views: 948215

Love–
a touch that shocks
the peace from our nerves
and ends in longing.
~ s
by sarjane
Thu Aug 28, 2008 12:32 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: FISH POND...(Mlou'sDailyPIM)
Replies: 2499
Views: 948215

One more, because I've been M.I.A. :D

My inner eyes will a delicious end–
you and I sitting on porcelain,
cigarette in hand, desire lit anew.
by sarjane
Thu Aug 28, 2008 12:24 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: FISH POND...(Mlou'sDailyPIM)
Replies: 2499
Views: 948215

Embrace the bitter gospel
to hold dime in hand–
you believe man giveth,
yet push self to the end.
~ s

:-D
by sarjane
Sun Jul 06, 2008 12:12 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: FISH POND...(Mlou'sDailyPIM)
Replies: 2499
Views: 948215

Dropping in to say hello, Mlou! I'll post a little something later to slowly acclimate myself to the new poetry pool. :) It's been a while, and it was good to hear from you!
by sarjane
Tue Jan 30, 2007 10:53 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY TUESDAY - 1-30-07
Replies: 23
Views: 15793

can we
ever know man,
as one can say to know
the wind -- its comings and goings
on earth?
by sarjane
Tue Sep 19, 2006 1:53 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - 9-12-06
Replies: 31
Views: 22630

hey guys....coming back to the poetry boards rather late, but better late than never! my "Image in 8" contribution (so far...i'm still at work):

ripples on the river signal a smaller God
by sarjane
Wed Jul 26, 2006 8:43 pm
Forum: The Coffee Shop
Topic: What are you listening to?
Replies: 931
Views: 500211

"Save Me" - Shinedown
by sarjane
Wed Jun 14, 2006 8:29 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Gesture of Love
Replies: 4
Views: 4998

Well put, Lilac, and I agree as well.
by sarjane
Sat Jun 03, 2006 5:00 pm
Forum: The Writer's Life - Techniques, Characterization, Writing Ideas, & More
Topic: The Stages of a writer
Replies: 11
Views: 7069

Hanging between #5 and #6, though slowly fulfilling stage 6....happy to be submitting poetry again after a year of off-and-on writing periods. Rejections, schmections! Just because one person doesn't agree with your writing doesn't mean that it's wrong.....maybe it just hasn't made its way to the ri...
by sarjane
Wed May 10, 2006 3:53 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - May 9, '06
Replies: 8
Views: 7074

Okay, okay....meant to post here first but messed up.

3. a pair of eyes peer from the darkness
by sarjane
Tue May 09, 2006 11:38 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - May 9, '06
Replies: 8
Views: 7074

oops, guess I should have posted here.

3. a flick of cigarette--there goes my heart.
by sarjane
Sat Apr 29, 2006 4:24 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - April 25, 2006
Replies: 3
Views: 3435

good suggestion -- I think it's more to the point, and the poem's pace picks up a little. I'll figure out how to word it better to fit the rhythm "in my head"... As for a title, I always hate that part. I never know exactly how to title a poem best, and usually the title reveals something about the ...
by sarjane
Fri Apr 21, 2006 3:00 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Rhymed or free form poll?
Replies: 18
Views: 8639

That's a valid point, peng. I guess it all depends on one's definition of poetry, or a poem. Even dictionary.com defines a poem in hazy terms: A verbal composition designed to convey experiences, ideas, or emotions in a vivid and imaginative way, characterized by the use of language chosen for its s...
by sarjane
Fri Apr 21, 2006 8:57 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Rhymed or free form poll?
Replies: 18
Views: 8639

I prefer free form, though I started writing poetry using rhyme. I thought it best to start that way since a rhyme scheme gives you a set form to work within, like boundaries on a canvas. It seems like most of my thoughts and poems now have no "rhyme" when they come, so why force it to go that way? ...
by sarjane
Fri Apr 21, 2006 8:48 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: MY MAN *feel free to comment*
Replies: 6
Views: 4152

I feel, like Mlou, that it does have a good running rhythm and rhyme going for it. My only problem with it is that it is talking about a relationship in a very general way. It seems like the best way to convey an experience in poetry is by relating "the general" through "a specific moment." Sometime...
by sarjane
Thu Apr 13, 2006 7:47 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: By your name (feedback)
Replies: 7
Views: 4326

I was curious why you didn't write about what really happened, as opposed to creating something "over the top" to sidestep writing about the real issue at hand--not that there's anything wrong with writing "beyond" what you know. I only ask this because I remembered something my English professor sa...
by sarjane
Thu Apr 13, 2006 7:38 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Bride... comments please..
Replies: 12
Views: 6776

Two questions: (1) Why did you use rhyme in this poem? Some lines seem contrived - like they were worded a certain way to accommodate the rhyme scheme. For example, this rhyme in this section calls attention to itself because of the repetition of the same sound 5 times: you look great I guess neithe...
by sarjane
Mon Apr 10, 2006 6:16 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The perfect moment- please leave feedback
Replies: 6
Views: 4066

Hi Angel No1... I would like to leave my suggestions, and I hope you do not take offense from them as well. I too am not perfect at writing poetry, but I believe that the best way for a reader to experience what is written in a poem is through concrete imagery. This is my personal approach, but it a...
by sarjane
Thu Apr 06, 2006 9:14 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - April 4, 2006
Replies: 21
Views: 12018

The plum, actually (sort of removed from purple, but the inspiration was there)...I still want to play with it a little more...Mlou, do you think this poem is worth the investment of time and work? And I've been away a while because I found a job and am trying to save up some money before moving to ...
by sarjane
Thu Apr 06, 2006 4:51 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - April 4, 2006
Replies: 21
Views: 12018

<i>What does the color purple bring to mind? Well, here is my best effort from the past 10 minutes. Still at work, so I must submit this first draft for now. Critiques welcome.</i> "solya's due" is inked in the square inch borders of today, the words fluttering on one of those cheap insurance calend...
by sarjane
Tue Nov 08, 2005 12:12 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Oct. 25 & Nov. 1
Replies: 24
Views: 16917

Ha ha ha
by sarjane
Mon Nov 07, 2005 2:45 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Oct. 25 & Nov. 1
Replies: 24
Views: 16917

thanks ms...we are curious creatures, aren't we? I watched a 17-month-old baby (I overheard her dad say so) at lunch, and it was amazing how observant she was. I could almost sense her passing judgment on everyone she saw. Later, when a group of parents came in with their kids and sat at the table b...
by sarjane
Sat Nov 05, 2005 10:11 am
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Oct. 25 & Nov. 1
Replies: 24
Views: 16917

Yes - that's exactly what it's like! I'm glad I tried the poetry challenge this time. I do read them and make an effort, but it usually takes me longer than a week to ponder on the topic and let the words work their way out of me. What's been funny is that most of my posted poems were created a day ...
by sarjane
Fri Nov 04, 2005 10:26 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE - Oct. 25 & Nov. 1
Replies: 24
Views: 16917

Okay, this is my poem for immortalizing a day...though, in truth, it is only immortalizing one moment of a day. I feel this qualifies anyway because it was the only moment worth remembering from this day. Crit welcomed. Reflections From A Stranger's Face As I waited for Ted to find his decent cup of...

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