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by JT
Thu Jul 29, 2010 12:46 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 7-27-10
Replies: 23
Views: 15448

Mlou wrote:melody


Go to youtube and punch in "Tal Wilkenfeld awesome solo" and see the melody she pulls from that bass during her solo on Cause We've Ended As Lovers with Jeff Beck. I think she was only twenty at the time.
by JT
Wed Jul 28, 2010 3:29 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 7-27-10
Replies: 23
Views: 15448

Tal Wilkenfeld Cause We've Ended As Lovers , you're sitting at a Table For One . Just a young girl of eighteen, playing with the big boys. Now you're twenty-three. Like they say, sweet child, you've got the groove; you've got the moves. Your hands do cartwheels, with each song you play. Your hands....
by JT
Sat Jul 24, 2010 6:11 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Leave Her Alone (Villanelle Form)
Replies: 7
Views: 8215

Re: Leave Her Alone (Villanelle Form)

Whoops. Mlou informed me that I had already posted this here somewhere and sometime in the past.
by JT
Sat Jul 24, 2010 5:01 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Leave Her Alone (Villanelle Form)
Replies: 7
Views: 8215

Leave Her Alone (Villanelle Form)

Leave her alone so she can brood About good men she berated But please understand her bad mood She wasn't nice and he was crude Visions of love quickly faded Leave her alone so she can brood Ladies like her appear too shrewd And, yes, she is a bit jaded But please understand her bad mood Wasn't it h...
by JT
Fri Jul 23, 2010 3:47 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

The contests are fun, aren't they? Even if you don't win, they make it interesting. Yes. The AP site is fun, and I've come across some really good poetry...and some really bad. But it is fun. That's the main thing. The concept of points seems to work well. I, like, Mlou am not comfortable with givi...
by JT
Thu Jul 22, 2010 2:22 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: You
Replies: 15
Views: 12977

I always thought that summertime thawing causes the surfaces of certain glaciers to melt, giving them features. But I also thought that oceans cause certain winds to blow. If I'm wrong, it just shows how much (little) I know about meteorology (sp?) and topography.
by JT
Thu Jul 22, 2010 12:50 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: You
Replies: 15
Views: 12977

Ahhh . . nothing like the liberal use of cliches to make a love poem fluffy and mushy. Glad my goal was accomplished. Thanks, mlou and mae.
by JT
Wed Jul 21, 2010 6:48 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: You
Replies: 15
Views: 12977

Hey, thanks for cathing the two "awakes" - changes made.
by JT
Wed Jul 21, 2010 4:36 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: You
Replies: 15
Views: 12977

i like jt's phrasing as is. Thanks. Me too. 8) Here is some more of it to pick on. Pretty mushy, huh? The look in your eyes reflects dark and bright. I'm lost in your warmth and depth as the coming night brings peace. We wake and the air is soft, making love for the first time. I feel you in a worl...
by JT
Tue Jul 20, 2010 7:44 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: In Memoriam (Revised) (Help Please)
Replies: 14
Views: 10863

part of the beauty of this poem, in my opinion, is its very absractness. When I read this in a literal sense, the whole thing falls apart and does so from the very start. The letter has not even been burned yet in the poem so how could there be ashes? When I fool with it to make literal sense, any ...
by JT
Mon Jul 19, 2010 3:52 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: You
Replies: 15
Views: 12977

You

I feel you in a world
blown by oceans
never still.
by JT
Mon Jul 19, 2010 3:49 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

But, of course, your sheer talent earned it.

P.S. I entered the one sentence contest too.
by JT
Sun Jul 18, 2010 2:52 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

How do you find the forum where poetry that is up for comment is posted? I am thoroughly confused. Thanks.
by JT
Sat Jul 17, 2010 5:04 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: In Memoriam (Revised) (Help Please)
Replies: 14
Views: 10863

Dear Ladies, your comments and critique have been very helpful. My thanks runneth over. I have now spent so much time on this piece over the past year or so, I am going to sit on it (again) at least for a few days before changing it. I am keeping it if only because it achieves my goal of evoking fee...
by JT
Fri Jul 16, 2010 9:03 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: In Memoriam (Revised) (Help Please)
Replies: 14
Views: 10863

I certainly don't mind and appreciate any help on this. The poem is about divorce. A divorce initiated by the male narrator is imminent. The letter is a love letter in which he calls off the divorce, but then decides in the face of an ultimatum to burn the letter in one of their favorite spots - the...
by JT
Fri Jul 16, 2010 7:02 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

No intention to step on any toes, but their own threads just could be a problem for attracting new members. There are now quite a few of these "threads," which are really collections. A thread starts with one post (poem) and comments follow. Putting aside that only threads, not collections, are allo...
by JT
Fri Jul 16, 2010 6:16 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

Dear Lady, I carefully chose the word "next" but will have a look-see anyways.
by JT
Fri Jul 16, 2010 6:10 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: In Memoriam (Revised) (Help Please)
Replies: 14
Views: 10863

In Memoriam (Revised) (Help Please)

By the light of the moon, I will burn my letter to you and bury it under the rose petals behind the Cathedral in a stolen fragrant night. Rose and ash will scatter with a sigh of wind blowing gently then roaring ferocious, a thunderstorm leaving a child dead down the hill. Our ashes uncovered, we lo...
by JT
Fri Jul 16, 2010 5:58 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

No, the worst of it is that he was/is an excellent writer and very helpful, but only on his own vulgar terms. I really want to learn and grow, and accept constructive criticism no matter how hard it may be to swallow. That gosh darn Memoriam poem is still kicking around. I cut about half of it out. ...
by JT
Fri Jul 16, 2010 1:56 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

The poetry site I liked is the one I mentioned above. It was great until a little Napolean got involved and hundreds of the members (the vast majority)either quit or were banned for disagreeing with him. Oh well. My philosophy about past sins is borrowed from the 12 step programs. First, admit them ...
by JT
Thu Jul 15, 2010 3:47 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: The Plethora of Poetry Sites
Replies: 36
Views: 25690

Of course, quite a few of the sites were just mutual admiration societies, telling each other what great talent they all had. There was a really good poetry site sometime ago that came to naught when a so-called "co-owner" took over. Oh well. I don't consider myself a good poet, but like to post on...
by JT
Mon Jun 21, 2010 5:16 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Addiction (Squirrels Revised)*
Replies: 1
Views: 4112

Addiction (Squirrels Revised)*

My daily sickness, withdrawal... I'm trying to kick it hard, unlike your little brother, in pieces, then...just a tuft of fur. We're stuck in a crawl space, you and I, pumped up, punked out, bullets in a black hole. More benzoes, your brother screeches from the grave, an echo. Sunlight shines throug...
by JT
Sun Jun 20, 2010 5:46 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Wings - crits and comments sought
Replies: 11
Views: 6846

I will not consider dancing in the sun, only because I've used dancing with the eagles. Okay, now I'm back to butterflies "dancing in the sun", which means, if considered again, you would change the "dance" with the eagles. That makes sense to me because eagles do not "dance" on thermals. They "flo...
by JT
Sat Jun 19, 2010 3:03 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Wings - crits and comments sought
Replies: 11
Views: 6846

I think you may have provided your own solution.

mae wrote:"fluttering" is definitely what that swarm of butterflies was doing.


In my old dictionary, Webster's gives the example of "a flag fluttering in the wind." Several of the definitions seem to fit the image of a swarm of butterflies as well.
by JT
Fri Jun 18, 2010 3:13 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Wings - crits and comments sought
Replies: 11
Views: 6846

Re: Wings - crits and comments sought

In my opinion only, the following does not seem to fit with the voice and sincerity of the poem: flutterbying in the sun. I'm not sure whether "flutterbying" is a play on a word or an actual word. In any event, it doesn't fit for me. Would you consider something like "dancing in the sun" instead? Be...

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