I hope you get one soon, I hate going online and not having new Mlou!

"I write entirely to find out what I'm thinking, what I'm looking at, what I see and what it means. What I want and what I fear." -- Joan Didion (1934 - )


Maybe.

#2

Honored Guest

The garden
visitor’s
wings
were a blur,
nearly invisible,
shifting
the tiny creature's
darting
flight.
The delicate
green bird,
unaware
of its status
flitted
above a crumpled
watering can.

# 1 & # 3 Not So Sunny Shores Somewhere along a sandy lakeshore stroll our airy view was smothered by the fog. We turned around, followed fading footprints to find our way back home when suddenly a shrieking song without a melody split the sky and sent shivers down our spines. A rush of wings qu...

Lovely poem, Funky. Nice to see you still posting.

I'd like to have that window washing neighbor too. A lawn mowing one would be nice as well.

Nice to see someone still here, OP!

It is too bad. This was a wonderful community. It provided inspiration, advice, and encouragement.

I will try, but it's difficult enough writing between phone calls for one site.

Whoa! Instant karma. Excellent story, Timber.

I think you have a name crisis in this line: A month later Greg was dead. Jake had to read it in the papers, that Jake had gone over the edge of the platform

Good luck with any future plans you have for the story.

I can't wait to read it timber.

nicely done, gentle and nostalgic.

For some reason (insanity, perhaps) the first thing I thought of when I saw prompt three was "I dreamed I was .... in my Maidenform bra".

Might as well. I think I might do a piece for #1 based on Stephen King's quote "The road to hell is paved with adverbs." But not until next week.

I can't wait to see where you place the rewrite.

One nice thing about AP is that they have groups to join as well, serious groups and less so. I pretty much stick to reading my favs.

Bone Poem My bones must be terribly shy; they've not been seen for years. Still the surgeon says they're there, waning away, beneath the all that is me. He's looking forward to the day he can replace them with steel. I think to the future , years away, I hope, and to the cremetorium and the shining ...

So, JT and mae, what are your names at AP? Message me if you don't want to post them here, please.

Very nice, JB.

Good use of a difficult word list, MLou.

What's a Heaven for?
("No ideas but in things"- William Carlos Williams)

No poet ever reached
Ideas higher than their grasp,
But many, now and then, perhaps
In dreams, saw the very
Things their words contrived.


-- As you can see, I threw a bit of Browning in as well.

mae, the structure of the poem is Stevens', after his poem "The Snowman". I just used it to illustrate the connection between dog and human.

Your piece is effective ... sad, but effective.

Mlou, yours is, may I say, inspired.

and Ms' poem is sweet and compact.

Lovely work everyone.

Challenge #1 The Dog (after Wallace Stevens) One must have a mind of wilderness To regard the road and the sky Both seemingly without end; And have traveled a long time To behold the junipers shagged with fur, The spruces ripe with the scent Of distant passings; and not to think Of any misery in the...

I always order too much Chinese food ... therefore, my offering is ALL from columns A and B. (It's a little rough I wrote it straight out, no time to edit, and please forgive the partial rhyme.) A Twisted Tale (in honor of Robert Service) The moon was old, the night was cold, we sat in the mine that...

First of all JT, congrats on taking on your addiction. I applaud your bravery and offer my best wishes for your future.

As to the poem, I like the conception but the execution could benefit from some editing as Mlou suggests, just to make it clearer to the reader.

You know, in Fireflare's piece ... "wary heart" would work as well as "weary heart" ... OP, keep practicing with the rhyming, it's the only way to become proficent, believe me. I once had a Professor of Writing praise my use of rhyme as "natural", there is nothing natural about it; I worked long and...

JT, shouldn't it be "pumpkin shells"? The double entendre is irresistible.