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by Olsenpotter
Fri Feb 14, 2014 9:16 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Willingly Naked
Replies: 1
Views: 5627

Willingly Naked

I just wanted to share the poem I wrote for my wife for Valentine's day. Willingly Naked There are so many disjointed parts to me I feel like a mirror hit dead center with a sledgehammer. What keeps me together? Why does my reflection not display the dark, jagged edges filling my insides? The answer...
by Olsenpotter
Fri Jan 25, 2013 9:41 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Mudge's Poetry Dump
Replies: 339
Views: 199598

Mudge, I love this. I've never had to make any kind of choice like this but the emotions you evoke here literally made me feel what that would be like. Personally I think the best line in this song/poem is the Bad memories and pain will be all that remain: I’ll slip out between a punchline and a tea...
by Olsenpotter
Mon Jun 27, 2011 7:55 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: POETRY CHALLENGE
Replies: 4
Views: 6117

First of all, Mae, I loved your poem. Funny yet sad at the same time. The man comes across as so lonely that he's doing all those things that his wife said to him when she was alive just to feel a connection to her. Very interesting. Second is my submission to the challenge. Hopefully it's good; I'v...
by Olsenpotter
Tue Nov 23, 2010 1:38 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE...9-21-10
Replies: 21
Views: 17352

<b>High School Drama</b> "You're cute, you're funny even, but no." Cute: It's a killing joke. "Maybe, if no one else asks me." No Senior Prom for me. As my mother says: "Girls don't make passes at boys in thick glasses." So when She, (capital S), said, "you're kind of cute." I took it to mean She li...
by Olsenpotter
Tue Nov 23, 2010 1:20 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Living a Gluten Free Life With You
Replies: 0
Views: 5870

Living a Gluten Free Life With You

I must admit when you told me I couldn't eat anymore bread, I felt betrayed. What about my baking? The joy of mixing flour, water, time, to create that delicious aroma of yeast that filled our kitchen to the point of drunkenness. I won't lie. I miss it. I miss gluten. There, I said it out loud. Howe...
by Olsenpotter
Thu Oct 28, 2010 6:32 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 10-26-10
Replies: 7
Views: 8113

Keep them coming Mlou. I'm still hanging on.
by Olsenpotter
Thu Oct 28, 2010 6:30 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 10-26-10
Replies: 7
Views: 8113

Challenge 1 Where have all the poets gone? I walk down rows, watching people, wondering, where have all the poets gone? I hear words like "LOL" and "OMG" assault my ears until the noise, like a bursting drum, overtakes my mind and stops my brain. WHERE ARE YOU? I yell. No one answers. No one seems t...
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 15, 2010 11:53 am
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE = 8-3-10
Replies: 15
Views: 11466

When I started this the speaker was just a bystander, who was walking along the beach and found some bones. Then I thought, heck, why not make it the killer who has an extreme issue with the falsity of people.

It's a lot darker than I meant, but I really like it.
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 15, 2010 9:15 am
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE 8-10-10
Replies: 9
Views: 8633

This is a poem about nothing.

There are no concrete images.

There are no rhymes.

There is no logic.

There is no music.

There are no people in this poem.

Except for me, the speaker, of whom

you know nothing.
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 15, 2010 9:09 am
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE = 8-3-10
Replies: 15
Views: 11466

Unknown "Body found in River Bank. Identity: Unknown. Cause of Death: Unknown. Any helpful information may be addressed to Heyburn Police Dept." I left your bones along the river bank. They'll be clean, shiny even, once the water and sand has taken away all your fears, doubt, sins; the things that p...
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 15, 2010 8:55 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Completely Incomplete (please hack and slash at will)
Replies: 9
Views: 9438

OK I fixed it. I'm not messing with it anymore. I love it the way it is now. Thank you all for the help and encouragement, very poet should have a life-line as good as Wordtrip! just one lingering question: is it chocolaty or chocolatey? My spell check says that the "e" is wrong, but without it look...
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 15, 2010 8:50 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Unspoken Emotion (comments are welcome)
Replies: 0
Views: 5429

Unspoken Emotion (comments are welcome)

There are some people for whom I have hidden feelings. For example, I, secretly, am jealous of my wife because she has a 401k. I, also, am unable to speak about any of my friends in other countries because speaking increases the distance and loneliness sets in. As well as having the fear of scarring...
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 08, 2010 11:17 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Journey
Replies: 8
Views: 11157

Written a little over five years ago, and still I see your inspiring cadence (I think thats the word I want) in this poem. It might be a little strange that I'm going this far back but I wanted to see how you've developed as a poet, Mae, and this was the best way to do it. If you don't mind, I'd lik...
by Olsenpotter
Sun Aug 08, 2010 10:27 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Completely Incomplete (please hack and slash at will)
Replies: 9
Views: 9438

This is a devil of a poem. I can't decide if I like the last line of the third stanza. "leaves no room for personal space" sounds so stuffy. Not close, intimate, the way I want to poem to read. It's excluding, not including. The tone of the poem is suppose to be about closeness, about being surround...
by Olsenpotter
Mon Aug 02, 2010 6:57 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Completely Incomplete (please hack and slash at will)
Replies: 9
Views: 9438

I know it should be me, but I think the I brings out the difference in "you and I" and "us". I had it as me at first, but I like the way it reads. Maybe I should change it to me.
by Olsenpotter
Sat Jul 31, 2010 12:03 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Completely Incomplete (please hack and slash at will)
Replies: 9
Views: 9438

Completely Incomplete (please hack and slash at will)

I'm afraid of owning a bigger house. I happen to like having a closet so small your clothes tango with my clothes and leave their soft scent on my stiff collars. The tiny kitchen with one counter lets my cooking meld with your cleaning, ("I wish you'd wipe up your own flour!") and leaves no room for...
by Olsenpotter
Thu Jul 29, 2010 6:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 7-27-10
Replies: 23
Views: 15694

First to address Mlou,
well her hand was keeping her leaning against the wall...
JT,
I like the way that your poem is so straight-forward (as most of your poems are).
Penn,
I love your poem. It's sad but very well written.
by Olsenpotter
Tue Jul 27, 2010 11:44 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE - 7-27-10
Replies: 23
Views: 15694

First to reply. Ahh...I miss you Wordtrip. Hands touching Hands She was standing between the kitchen and the dining room; leaning with one hand on the door frame, the other rubbing her forehead, soothing the headache brought on by work while the meatballs simmered in their sauce. "You know what they...
by Olsenpotter
Wed Jul 07, 2010 8:18 pm
Forum: Poetry Prompts
Topic: TUESDAY POETRY CHALLENGE July 6, 2010
Replies: 19
Views: 12845

But it can't be that clear cut

There's a lonely guitar playing
the color purple
somewhere downstairs.

I await my haircut
from a mother-in-law
who sees things in
black and white.

And as I type my poetry
on a red Eee pc,
I can't help but
ponder the meanings of

grey.
by Olsenpotter
Thu May 06, 2010 5:27 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Olsen's Daily Poetry
Replies: 5
Views: 4147

I was in the Hospital with my son all day yesterday, so here's the poem I should of posted. May 5th Content-Aware Filling I have a photo of us kissing. It's perfect except for the unsightly shadow across your face. It's easy now to remove the blemish. Just select with the lasso, and fill. No one is ...
by Olsenpotter
Tue May 04, 2010 3:17 pm
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Olsen's Daily Poetry
Replies: 5
Views: 4147

May 4th
Untitled

I had dreams once.
I traded them in

for 60 hour work week
and a paycheck.

I traded in my heart
for diapers and mushy food.

I exchanged my well-loved books
for rattles and blue baby blankets.

And today, as I look back,
I realize I got the better

trade.
by Olsenpotter
Mon May 03, 2010 10:44 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Olsen's Daily Poetry
Replies: 5
Views: 4147

May 3rd 'Winter's not gone yet, if the wild geese fly that way.' I'll be 26 tomorrow. 26, the year after that milestone 25. Still I feel age setting in my bones like a cold wind blowing across my greying hair. I use to say I looked like a sexy Gato when I shaved; going out on a date dressed in my bl...
by Olsenpotter
Sun May 02, 2010 10:15 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: DUELING POEMS
Replies: 6
Views: 4104

Mlou,
I like your poem. The second stanza is a little bit too cute for me, but I like it. Just wanted to say that I don't feel the way my poem does. I was trying to answer those haunting lines of Shakespeare's Sonnet 29.
by Olsenpotter
Sun May 02, 2010 10:08 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Olsen's Daily Poetry
Replies: 5
Views: 4147

May 2nd Like liver with Bacon I am not the King of the Lanes at the local bowling alley. Nor am I widely known in this small town where potatoes are worth more than the dollar. I do not sit on my porch and watch the sunset while children and dogs play hide and seek in my yard. I am not like the migh...
by Olsenpotter
Sun May 02, 2010 12:05 am
Forum: Pondering Poetry - Share poems, work on form, learn types of poetry
Topic: Olsen's Daily Poetry
Replies: 5
Views: 4147

Olsen's Daily Poetry

Mae, Here I am posting my first poem for the month of May. On May 1st. No faltering on my end. Trouble Deaf Heaven Those words haunt me like sins forgiven. I alone beweep my outcast state. Even with friends and talent and wife and child, when my bootless cries leave my lips at night my woes can not ...

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